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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. with this statement? v. 1
These days, the world’s environmental condition has become dire due to the lack of effective measures taken to diminish the problem. One major way to combat environmental hazards is to increase the price of fuel, which is one of the significant sources of catastrophes that could instigate environmental degradation. However, I do not agree that this is the finest solution for reducing environmental problems as some other ways would be much more effective for solving the problems related to the environment. Although excessive use of fuels has a detrimental effect on the environment, there are other activities, such as industrial pollution, that have even much more consequences on the environment. In other words, because of their robust operational activities, manufacturing industries use heavy types of machinery and raw materials that produce wastages, which can be perilous for the environment, if not discharged properly. For example, a recent study conducted on the status of air pollution in Bangladesh concluded that the biggest single contributor for deteriorating air quality in the country is the production of brick by conventional procedures. Therefore, industries need to use efficient technologies and equipment in their daily operations. Another way to prevent the threats resulting from adverse environmental impact is to put a surge in tree plantation. Some areas are vulnerable to several natural calamities, and planting trees is the most effective way to reduce the impact brought about by any unwanted natural disaster. Moreover, trees are the pivotal source that reduces the amount of CO2 in the atmosphere and helps to negate the greenhouse effect. In conclusion, despite the benefits that may be brought by increasing the prices of fuel to decrease negative impacts stem from environmental degradation, I firmly believe that with the use of efficient technologies in industrial activities and planting more trees could be the impeccable way to reduce environmental problems.
These days, the world’s
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environmental
condition has become dire due to the lack of effective measures taken to diminish the
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problem
. One major way to combat
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environmental
hazards is to increase the price of fuel, which is one of the significant sources of catastrophes that could instigate
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environmental
degradation.
However
, I do not
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agree
that this is the finest solution for reducing
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environmental
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problems
as
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some
other ways would be much more effective for solving the
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problems
related to the environment.

Although excessive
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use
of fuels has a detrimental effect on the environment, there are other activities, such as industrial pollution, that have even much more consequences on the environment.
In other words
,
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because
of their robust operational activities, manufacturing industries
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use
heavy types of machinery and raw materials that produce
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wastages
, which can be perilous for the environment, if not discharged
properly
.
For example
, a recent study conducted on the status of air pollution in Bangladesh concluded that the biggest single contributor for deteriorating air quality in the country is the production of brick by conventional procedures.
Therefore
, industries need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
efficient technologies and equipment in their daily operations.

Another way to
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prevent
the threats resulting from adverse
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environmental
impact is to put a surge in
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tree
plantation.
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Some
areas are vulnerable to several natural calamities, and planting
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trees
is the most effective way to
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reduce
the impact brought about by any unwanted natural disaster.
Moreover
,
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trees
are the pivotal source that
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reduces
the amount of CO2 in the atmosphere and
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helps
to negate the greenhouse effect.

In conclusion
, despite the benefits that may
be brought
by increasing the prices of fuel to decrease
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negative
impacts stem from
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environmental
degradation, I
firmly
believe that with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of efficient technologies in industrial activities and planting more
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trees
could be the impeccable way to
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reduce
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environmental
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problems
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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