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MORE PEOLPLE HAVE UNHEALTHY DIET AND DO NOT DO ENOUGH EXERCIESS WHAT ARE THE REASONS FOR THIS? HOW CAN WE ENCOURAGE PEOPLE TO HAVE A HEALTHY LIFE STYLE v.1

MORE PEOLPLE HAVE UNHEALTHY DIET AND DO NOT DO ENOUGH EXERCIESS WHAT ARE THE REASONS FOR THIS? HOW CAN WE ENCOURAGE PEOPLE TO HAVE A HEALTHY LIFE STYLE v. 1
Unhealthy diet has been the epicentre of discussion and a Unanimous conclusive Agreement is yet to be achieved different distinguished people have expressed their views on this issue the multiple modes of communication, be it the mainstream media or the social media Firstly, this essay would delve into the reasons why people choose to eat unhealthy diet and do not exercise I would also discuss some measures to encourage people to adopt a healthy Trend. To begin with, there are Myraid reasons which reinforce my perceptions to begin with the first and the foremost reason of taking unhealthy diet is first place life of today now people have become workaholic and they hardly take their meals at proper time secondly they often miss their breakfast which plays an important role in maintaining our health they are running into the rat raceTo acquire the success and to have a standard lifestyle neither they eat healthy meals Nor they do regular exercises which consequently make them passive and unhealthy thirdly people are also unaware of the consequences perhaps people do not realise that obesity not only Course one disease it brings more diseases like hypertension and diabetes with it. Moreover, People must realise that health is wealth people can be encouraged to adopt a healthy lifestyle in many ways first of all government should run some health awareness campaign to make the people understand about the significance of health in addition to this authority should invest some money in constructing stadiums and gyms near to their residential area so they would go there to keep themselves fit and strong. In conclusion the main reason behind this problem is there mundane lifestyle Employers should also provide some holidays, without cutting their salaries to their employee this way they would be able to spend time with their family and they would also do regular exercise
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Unhealthy
diet has been the
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epicentre
of discussion and a Unanimous conclusive Agreement is
yet
to
be achieved
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different
distinguished
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people
have expressed their views on this issue the multiple modes of communication, be it the mainstream media or the social media
Firstly
, this essay would delve into the
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reasons
why
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people
choose to eat
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unhealthy
diet and do not exercise I would
also
discuss
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some
measures to encourage
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people
to adopt a healthy Trend.

To
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begin
with, there are
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Myraid
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reasons
which reinforce my perceptions to
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begin
with the
first
and the foremost
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reason
of taking
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unhealthy
diet is
first
place life of
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today
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now
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people
have become
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workaholic and
they hardly take their meals at proper time
secondly
they
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often
miss their breakfast which plays an
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important
role in maintaining our
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health
they are running into the rat
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raceTo
acquire the success and to have a standard lifestyle neither they eat healthy meals Nor they do regular exercises which
consequently
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make
them passive and
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unhealthy
thirdly
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people
are
also
unaware of the consequences perhaps
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people
do not
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realise
that obesity not
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only
Course one disease it brings more diseases like hypertension and diabetes with it.

Moreover
,
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People
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must
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realise
that
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health
is wealth
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people
can
be encouraged
to adopt a healthy lifestyle in
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many
ways
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first of all
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government
should run
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some
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health
awareness campaign to
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make
the
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people
understand about the significance of
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health
in addition
to this authority should invest
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some
money in constructing stadiums and gyms near to their residential area
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so
they would go there to
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keep
themselves fit and strong.

In conclusion
the main
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reason
behind this problem is there mundane lifestyle Employers should
also
provide
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some
holidays, without cutting their salaries to their employee this way they would be able to spend time with their
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
family and
they would
also
do regular exercise
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay MORE PEOLPLE HAVE UNHEALTHY DIET AND DO NOT DO ENOUGH EXERCIESS WHAT ARE THE REASONS FOR THIS? HOW CAN WE ENCOURAGE PEOPLE TO HAVE A HEALTHY LIFE STYLE v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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