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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.7

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 7
Nowadays, there is a popular phenomenon which is known as the obligation of owning a car and depending on it as a mean of transport, it is supposed that this has led to a serious traffic congestion, I strongly agree with this opinion, and this essay will demonstrate more about it, as well as the reasons behind this sort of phenomenon. Over the past thirty years, people started depending more on cars. Although, using a car for transportation consumes more gas, and forces you to spend more money, people prefer it. They consider it as the main mean of transport, which they see as an indispensable way, the reasons behind that are various, firstly, they tend to use an easy way rather than using the public transport as it takes more time and effort, furthermore, people think that owning the latest car and the most expensive will show your belonging to a high social class and others would appreciate you more for following the trend, and this proves that people tend to show off. Government has the biggest role to fix this kind of belief, they have to work harder on convincing the people with ways to decrease the traffic congestion as well as the advantages of using other means of transportations, they have to start with doing some social campaigns that concentrate on people’s health, they can encourage people to use the bike to transport in case of short distances as bikes are environment-friendly, and they benefit the health as well, in addition, people should be provided with myriad of public transport with fine fare so that they can cut the expenses of using gas for their cars. In conclusion, there are many ways that can be used to stop people from depending the most on their cars and start thinking in more rational ideas which mainly lead for a better environment, this process could take a long time but finally it will result in a more sensible society.
Nowadays, there is a popular phenomenon which
is known
as the obligation of owning a
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car
and depending on it as a mean of
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transport
, it
is supposed
that this has led to a serious traffic congestion, I
strongly
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agree
with this opinion, and this essay will demonstrate more about it,
as well
as the reasons behind this sort of phenomenon.

Over the past thirty years,
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people
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started
depending more on
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cars
. Although, using a
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car
for transportation consumes more gas, and forces you to spend more money,
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people
prefer it. They consider it as the main mean of
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transport
, which they
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see
as an indispensable
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way
, the reasons behind that are various,
firstly
, they tend to
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use
an easy
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way
rather
than using the public
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transport
as it takes more time and effort,
furthermore
,
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people
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think
that owning the latest
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car
and the most expensive will
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show
your belonging to a high social
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class
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and others
would appreciate you more for following the trend, and this proves that
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people
tend to
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show
off.

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Government
has the biggest role to
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fix
this kind of belief, they
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have to
work harder on convincing the
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people
with
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ways
to decrease the traffic congestion
as well
as the advantages of using other means of transportations, they
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have to
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start
with doing
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some
social campaigns that concentrate on
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people’s
health, they can encourage
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people
to
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use
the bike to
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transport
in case of short distances as bikes are environment-friendly, and they benefit the health
as well
,
in addition
,
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people
should
be provided
with myriad of public
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transport
with fine fare
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so
that they can
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cut
the expenses of using gas for their cars.

In conclusion
, there are
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many
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ways
that can be
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used
to
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stop
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people
from depending the most on their
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cars
and
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start
thinking in more rational
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ideas
which
mainly
lead for a better environment, this process could take a long time
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but
finally
it will result in a more sensible society.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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