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The best way to solve the traffic congestion in city is to provide free public transport for 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The best way to solve the traffic congestion in city is to provide free public transport for 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. v. 1
In recent times, traffic congestion has increased tremendously in all major cities around the world. Some people argue that that the best solution for this issue is to provide public transport for 24 hours a day and for all 7 days and I completely agree on this. On the one hand, some are of the opinion that private vehicles are a need and they have few valid points regarding the same. Firstly, public transport system is not that advanced in many cities and their availability is also minimal. Secondly, it is not that frequent especially during peak hours and hence it is difficult for working people and students to depend fully on this. Besdies, the quality and service is also not up to the mark in many places and this motivate people to have their own transportation, which will in turn result in the increase of traffic. Moreover, having own vehicle helps to prioritise the needs and give a control over the timings and life style since they do not have to rush to catch a train or a bus. On the other hand, another set of people, including me, believe that the governemnt should provide public transportation facilities whole day and night so that everyone can fully depend on this. First of all, there should be an increase in the quality and number of public transports like trains and buses and it should be more frequent so that the citizens will not think about own vehicles. This in turn will help to reduce the number of vehicles on the road, thereby reducing the traffic to a great extent. For example, the government of Singapore has an extensive and highly effective local transport system that includes air-conditioned buses and trains and this has paved the way for less private vehicle. Although people have the money to own a car or a bike, since the public transport is so much comfortable and faster, many prefer to opt for this. This has caused a tremendous impact in their traffic problems. Besides, this will also help to reduce pollution since the number of vehciles using fuel is less. To conclude, traffic is a growing problem in many cities all over the world and it is high time, we should find a solution. In my opinion, providing comfortable public transport option will definetely help to reduce this, thereby decreasing pollution.
In recent times,
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traffic
congestion has increased
tremendously
in all major cities around the world.
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Some
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people
argue
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that that
the best solution for this issue is to provide
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public
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transport
for 24 hours a day and for all 7 days and I completely
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agree
on this.

On the one hand,
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some
are of the opinion that private
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vehicles
are a
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need and
they have few valid points regarding the same.
Firstly
,
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public
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transport
system is not that advanced in
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many
cities and their availability is
also
minimal.
Secondly
, it is not that frequent
especially
during peak hours and
hence
it is difficult for working
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people
and students to depend
fully
on this.
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Besdies
, the quality and service is
also
not up to the mark in
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many
places and this motivate
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people
to have their
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own
transportation, which will in turn result in the increase of
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traffic
.
Moreover
, having
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own
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vehicle
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helps
to
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prioritise
the needs and give a control over the timings and life style since they do not
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have to
rush to catch a train or a bus.

On the other hand
, another set of
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people
, including me, believe that the
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governemnt
should provide
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public
transportation facilities whole day and night
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so
that everyone can
fully
depend on this.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, there should be an increase in the quality and number of
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public
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transports
like trains and buses and it should be more frequent
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so
that the citizens will not
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think
about
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own
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vehicles
. This in turn will
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help
to
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reduce
the number of
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vehicles
on the road, thereby reducing the
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traffic
to a great extent.
For example
, the
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government
of Singapore has an extensive and
highly
effective local
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transport
system that includes air-conditioned buses and trains and this has paved the way for less private
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vehicle
. Although
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people
have the money to
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own
a car or a bike, since the
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public
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transport
is
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so
much comfortable and faster,
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many
prefer to opt for this. This has caused a tremendous impact in their
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traffic
problems.
Besides
, this will
also
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help
to
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reduce
pollution since the number of
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vehciles
using fuel is less.

To conclude
,
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traffic
is a growing problem in
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many
cities all over the world and it is high time, we should find a solution. In my opinion, providing comfortable
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public
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transport
option will
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definetely
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help
to
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reduce
this, thereby decreasing pollution.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to solve the traffic congestion in city is to provide free public transport for 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
396 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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