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The best way to reduce youth crimes is to educate their parents with parental skills. To what extent you agree or disagree? v.3

The best way to reduce youth crimes is to educate their parents with parental skills. v. 3
In the current scenario, the world has been suffered from many disturbing issues, however an ever-increasing crime rate which are committed by youth needs to be controlled on priority. Although it is argued that the best appropriate approach to resolve this issue is to educate youngster' s parents on the breeding skills. I believe that in addition to this aspect, the bureaucrat also plays an crucial role to tackle this menace in proper way. To begin with, today' s young generation observe and inculcate the way their parents live their lives. To be more precise, it plays pivotal role in terms of how do they behave with their child? , how do they teach their child about morals and values of life? Moreover, parents could restrict company of their child to the friends to make them aware about certain anti-social activities and keep them away from it. Neverthless, this is not only solution and may not reduce the rate of crimes which are committed by youngsters up to the mark. Admittedly, the conscious efforts by both government and parent play role which is more indispensable. The enforcement of stern laws and strict legislation would not only punish culprits but also sensitize other young offenders. Furthermore, indeed this key measure would curb incidences of petty crimes, organised offenses, severe felonies and many more. For example, the introduction and execution of rule number 370 by the government of India in 2017, for the people particularly youth who committed fraud, robbery, smuggling, has decreased the number of crimes in the country. In conclusion, while the burgeoning of crime rate by adult is burning issue in front of the globe, which needs to be tackled for better future generation. The development of upbringing skills of parents is necessary, undoubtedly this is not only and best way. I believe that the government plays an incredible role along with parent to reduce rate of crimes by youngsters.
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many
disturbing issues,
however
an ever-increasing
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crime
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rate
which
are committed
by youth needs to
be controlled
on priority. Although it
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that the best appropriate approach to resolve this issue is to educate
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youngster&
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parents
on the breeding
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skills
. I believe that
in addition
to this aspect, the bureaucrat
also
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an
crucial
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role
to tackle this menace in proper way.

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begin
with,
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today&
#039; s young generation observe and inculcate the way their
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parents
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live
their
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lives
. To be more precise, it
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pivotal
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role
in terms of how do they behave with their child?
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,
how do they teach their child about morals and values of life?
Moreover
,
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parents
could restrict
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company
of their child to the friends to
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make
them aware about certain anti-social activities and
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keep
them away from it.
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, this is not
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only
solution and may not
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reduce
the
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rate
of
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crimes
which
are committed
by youngsters up to the mark.

Admittedly
, the conscious efforts by both
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government
and
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parent
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play
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role
which is more indispensable. The enforcement of stern laws and strict legislation would not
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only
punish culprits
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but
also
sensitize other young offenders.
Furthermore
,
indeed
this key measure would curb incidences of petty
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crimes
,
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offenses, severe felonies and
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many
more.
For example
, the introduction and execution of
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rule
number 370 by the
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government
of India in 2017, for the
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people
particularly
youth who committed fraud, robbery, smuggling, has decreased the number of
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crimes
in the country.

In conclusion
, while the burgeoning of
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crime
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rate
by adult is burning issue in front of the globe, which needs to
be tackled
for better future generation. The development of upbringing
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skills
of
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parents
is necessary,
undoubtedly
this is not
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only
and best way. I believe that the
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government
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plays
an incredible
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role
along with
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parent
to
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reduce
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rate
of
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crimes
by youngsters.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to reduce youth crimes is to educate their parents with parental skills. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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