Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

5) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v.2

5) There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 2
I disagreed that there is nothing young people can teach older people. The person in each stage of his life he will learn something new, even from young people, they can teach us several things, i think they are so important to teach us manythings for three reasons: First, when the life becomes modern and everything start to change we need help even from young people. I remembered my grandfather he was older than me but i' m always teach him, how he can use his smart phone, the computer, because there is advancement in tecnology and he had never hear of some new staff. He was always appreciate what i' m doing for him. Second: there are many older persons who don' t learn the writing and reading so they need help may be from youngest so they will learn from them. My neigbors didn' t learn how to write or read, she asked her son to teach her, so he will teach her although he is younger than him. Third: many people moved from thier country and lived in different one, and sent their kids to the school of the new country. The kids there will learn a lot of new things who thier parents don' t know it and the kids will transfer these new informations to their parents. When i moved with my son from my country to germany, i wasn' t know their language. i sent my son to the school and i was at home for a year without work, every day when my son came back from the school he teach me new word and i kept learn from him alot of things. So there are a lot of things that is important we can learn it from the young people it ' s not depend on the age it is depend on many different things.
I disagreed that there is nothing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teach
older
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. The person in each stage of his life he will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
something
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
, even from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, they can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teach
us several things,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
they are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teach
us
Possible spelling mistake found.
manythings
for three reasons:

First
, when the life becomes modern and everything
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
we need
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
even from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. I remembered my grandfather he was older than me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
Possible spelling mistake found.
i&
#039; m always
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teach
him, how he can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
his smart phone, the computer,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
there is advancement in
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
tecnology and
he had never
Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: "heard".
hear
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
staff. He was always
Consider using a past participle here: "appreciated".
appreciate
what
Possible spelling mistake found.
i&
#039; m doing for him.

Second: there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
older persons who
Possible spelling mistake found.
don&
#039; t
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
the writing and reading
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they need
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
may be from youngest
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
from them. My
Possible spelling mistake found.
neigbors
Possible spelling mistake found.
didn&
#039; t
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
how to write or read, she asked her
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
son
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teach
her,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
he will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teach
her although he is younger than
In formal / written English, it is recommended that you use a subject pronoun.
him
.

Third:
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
from
Possible spelling mistake found.
thier
country and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lived
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
one, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
their kids to the school of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
country. The kids there will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
things who
Possible spelling mistake found.
thier
parents
Possible spelling mistake found.
don&
#039; t know it and the kids will transfer these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
The word 'informations' is a legal term. In standard English, the word 'information' is a non-count noun. Did you mean "information"?
informations
to their parents. When
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
with my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
son
from my country to
Possible spelling mistake found.
germany
, i
Possible spelling mistake found.
wasn&
#039; t know their language.
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
son
to the school and
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
was at home for a year without work, every day when my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
son
came back from the school he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "teaches", "taught".
teach
me
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
word and
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
from him
Possible spelling mistake found.
alot
of things.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
things
that is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
we can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
it from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
it ' s not depend on the age it is
Consider using a past participle here: "depended".
depend
on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
things.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
27Mistakes

IELTS essay 5) There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
313 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts