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IT IS GENERALLY ACCEPTED THAT EXERCISE IS GOOD FOR CHILDREN AND TEENAGERS. THERFORE, PHYSICAL EDUCATION AND SPORT SHOULD BE COMPULSORY FOR ALL STUDENTS IN ALL SCHOOLS. WHAT DO YOU THINK? v.11

IT IS GENERALLY ACCEPTED THAT EXERCISE IS GOOD FOR CHILDREN AND TEENAGERS. THERFORE, PHYSICAL EDUCATION AND SPORT SHOULD BE COMPULSORY FOR ALL STUDENTS IN ALL SCHOOLS. WHAT DO YOU THINK? v. 11
Presently, most of the people are showing interest in joining their children in various physical activities and games. Besides, they commonly believed that exercise plays a crucial role in their children's life. So, the higher officials should make it mandatory for children to actively participate in the extra-curricular activities. In this essay, I will debate on the advantages for children participating in multiple sports. Interestingly, the parent's are allowing their children's to actively participate in numerous sport events. Though they may not win all the time, but these participations help them a lot in their future. Moreover, this event helps them to reduce stress and anxiety, whereas they also contribute to establish a good relationship among others. A research stated 90% of the marks for student's in the United States had increased after participating in cricket. On the other hand, students are actively participating in games because they had experienced the joy of sharing things. Indeed, a person, who share a good memory with their team member, felt very happy in winning. These activities help their memory to improve a lot than any other contests. For instance, the games like cricket and basketball helps these students to increase their success chances. In the conclusion, a likely reason why the majority of the public had decided to join their children in sports because they had known the advantages caused by them. However, it tries them to share the feelings with other people. I think that people should be encouraged to take a crucial role participating in various games.
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, most of the
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people
are showing interest in joining their
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children
in various physical activities and
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games
.
Besides
, they
commonly
believed that exercise plays a crucial role in their children's life.
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So
, the higher officials should
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make
it mandatory for
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children
to
actively
participate in the extra-curricular activities. In this essay, I will debate on the advantages for
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children
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participating
in multiple sports.

Interestingly
, the
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parent's
are allowing their children's to
actively
participate in numerous sport
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events
. Though they may not win all the time,
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but
these
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participations
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help
them a lot in their future.
Moreover
, this
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event
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helps
them to
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reduce
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stress
and anxiety, whereas they
also
contribute to establish a
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good
relationship among others.
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stated 90% of the marks for student's in the United States had increased after
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participating
in cricket.

On the
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other
hand, students are
actively
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participating
in
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games
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because
they had experienced the joy of sharing things.
Indeed
, a person, who share a
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good
memory with their team member, felt
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very
happy in winning. These activities
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help
their memory to
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improve
a lot than any
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other
contests.
For instance
, the
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games
like cricket and basketball
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helps
these students to increase their success chances.

In the conclusion, a likely reason why the majority of the public had decided to
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join
their
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children
in sports
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because
they had known the advantages caused by them.
However
, it tries them to share the feelings with
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other
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people
. I
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think
that
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people
should
be encouraged
to take a crucial role
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participating
in various
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games
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay IT IS GENERALLY ACCEPTED THAT EXERCISE IS GOOD FOR CHILDREN AND TEENAGERS. THERFORE, PHYSICAL EDUCATION AND SPORT SHOULD BE COMPULSORY FOR ALL STUDENTS IN ALL SCHOOLS. WHAT DO YOU THINK? v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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