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The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres travelled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000. v.1

The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres travelled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000. v. 1
In the recent era, pollution and accommodation of the over population are at alarming stage and as a result health problem evolved day by day. In my opinion, I completely agree with the topic. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will illustrate my opinion with suitable example. In this section, I will highlight pollution related problems and necessary action has to be taken by union organization. Nowadays, everyone can see a drastic increase in air as well as water contamination. For control of these situations, ministry can make rules and regulation. For example, The Indian authority has implemented industrial act for the drainage of toxic chemical and air. These have to be followed by each company. In addition, air adultration is also produced by usage of more vehicles. For these, authority has to arrange more easy public transport. So that one can use it and reduce the usage of personal vehicle. For example, in Europe, most of individual use trains maintained by government. Furthermore, the accommodation is major problems nowadays faced by individuals. Overpopulation is one of the major problems across the globe. Ministry organization can arrange awareness seminars on family planning and make some policies. For instance, authority in china implemented rules and regulation over family planning to overcome overpopulation problem and such kind of action can help government to solve housing problems of the public. Furthermore, union authority of every country should generate some revenue for the individual and provide some scheme to buy homes. For instance, Indian government made AVAS Yojna for the accommodation of middle class families. In summary, political unit of the every country should make and implement some strict laws and regulation to overcome pollution as well as housing related problems.
In the recent era, pollution and accommodation of the over population are at alarming stage and
as a result
health
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problem
evolved day by day. In my opinion, I completely
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agree
with the topic.
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In
the upcoming paragraphs, I will illustrate my opinion with suitable example.

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In
this section, I will highlight pollution related
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problems
and necessary action
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has to
be taken
by union organization. Nowadays, everyone can
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see
a drastic increase in air
as well
as water contamination. For control of these situations, ministry can
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make
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rules
and regulation.
For example
, The Indian
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authority
has implemented industrial act for the drainage of toxic chemical and air. These
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have to
be followed
by each
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company
.
In addition
, air
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adultration
is
also
produced by usage of more vehicles. For these,
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authority
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has to
arrange more easy public transport.
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So
that one can
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use
it and
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reduce
the usage of personal vehicle.
For example
, in Europe,
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most of individual
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use
trains maintained by
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government
.

Furthermore
, the accommodation is major
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problems
nowadays faced by individuals. Overpopulation is one of the major
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problems
across the globe. Ministry organization can arrange awareness seminars on family planning and
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make
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some
policies.
For instance
,
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authority
in
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china
implemented
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rules
and regulation over family planning to overcome overpopulation
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problem
and such kind of action can
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help
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government
to solve housing
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problems
of the public.
Furthermore
, union
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authority
of every country should generate
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some
revenue for the individual and provide
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some
scheme to
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buy
homes.
For instance
, Indian
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government
made
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AVAS
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Yojna
for the accommodation of middle
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class
families.

In summary, political unit of the every country should
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make
and implement
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some
strict laws and regulation to overcome pollution
as well
as housing related
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problems
.
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IELTS essay The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres travelled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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