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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your Speaking. v.4

It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your Speaking. v. 4
In recent decades, environmental pollution has been receiving a great deal of media attention around the world due to its substantial impacts on our life. The essay will point out several causes leading to water contamination as well as negative consequences on human society and wildlife. There are different ways, resulting in the pollution of rain. Firstly, it is clear that a myriad of factories and enterprises nowadays are discharging untreated wastes into the sea and river. For example, Anaconda Aluminium in Montana produced manufacturing wastes that contaminated local drink sources with lead and chromium. Secondly, educating about rain pollution has not been disseminated to the general public and some community in the world. For example, in many remote areas in Vietnam such as a Lao CAI province, Ha Giang province, many people do not have opportunity access to education and thus they are unaware of their activities affecting negatively to drink environment or what can be done to protect it. There are several results of rain contamination impacting on human life and wildlife. First, a variety of species will be in danger due to the lack of fresh drink. As a result, this causes to the food chain disruption and a decline in the number of animals or even extinction of aquatic creature species. Second, human can suffer from a risk of some life-threatening diseases as they drink and live with toxic water. In fact, there are a myriad of people in the world died every year because of using polluted water. In conclusion, waste discharged by factories and awareness of society are two main factors causing to water pollution. These effects mentioned above has some serious impacs on both human society and animal life
In recent decades, environmental
pollution
has been receiving a great deal of media attention around the world due to its substantial impacts on our life. The essay will point out several causes leading to water contamination
as well
as
negative
consequences on
human
society and wildlife.

There are
different
ways, resulting in the
pollution
of rain.
Firstly
, it is
clear
that a myriad of factories and enterprises nowadays are discharging untreated wastes into the sea and river.
For example
, Anaconda
Aluminium
in Montana produced manufacturing wastes that contaminated local
drink
sources with lead and chromium.
Secondly
, educating about rain
pollution
has not
been disseminated
to the
general public
and
some
community in the world.
For example
, in
many
remote areas in Vietnam such as a Lao CAI province, Ha
Giang
province,
many
people
do not have opportunity access to education and
thus
they are unaware of their activities affecting
negatively
to
drink
environment or what can
be done
to protect it.

There are several results of rain contamination impacting on
human
life and wildlife.
First
, a variety of species will be in
danger
due to the lack of fresh
drink
.
As a result
, this causes to the food chain disruption and a decline in the number of animals or even extinction of aquatic creature species. Second,
human
can suffer from a
risk
of
some
life-threatening diseases as they
drink
and
live
with toxic water. In fact, there are a
myriad
of
people
in the world
died
every year
because
of using polluted water.

In conclusion
, waste discharged by factories and awareness of society are two main factors causing
to water
pollution
. These effects mentioned above has
some
serious
impacs
on both
human
society and animal
life
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your Speaking. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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