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The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities Derby and Nottingham Between 2000 and 2009 v.1

The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities Derby and Nottingham Between 2000 and 2009 v. 1
The amount of waste produced by households and industries is rising/increasing at an alarming rate. This essay intends to analyze the reasons for this increase in trash formulation and also suggest some measures to mitigate the problem / improve the situation. To begin with, increased consumption of packaged items is one of the main causes of excessive creation of rubbish. Companies nowadays utilize a variety of packaging materials such as plastic, polythene, and rubber. Although the packaging makes the item more attractive, the materials used in preparing packets are mostly non-biodegradable and they do not decompose. Since the packaging is always discarded, it increases the manufacturing of rubbish. In addition to this, people nowadays follow the throwaway culture. As companies are now focusing more on creating cheap and disposable products, people now prefer to acquire new things instead of reusing and repairing the old ones. As a result of this mass consumption of new items, the old and used items are discarded leading to the production of more rubbish. Ultimately, such practices cause the production of more non-decomposable garbage. The solutions are not simple, but they do exist. The government should enact strict laws that force companies use only bio-degradable materials for packaging purposes. In addition to using materials that decompose easily, manufacturers should invent new packaging materials that can be recycled. This will automatically reduce the amount of waste produced. Moreover, the government should encourage people to recycle items that are made of plastic, metals and glass items. For example, recently I read on Facebook about a beach in Australia, where machines are installed and people can buy a food item by just submitting used plastic bottles. These kinds of encouragement activities and events can help in persuading people to recycle. In conclusion, although many reasons such as the use of pseudo packaging materials and over consumerism contribute towards the increase in waste production, the government can reduce this growing problem by implementing stringent laws and by promoting recycling.
The amount of waste produced by households and industries is rising/increasing at an alarming rate. This essay intends to analyze the reasons for this increase in trash formulation and
also
suggest
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some
measures to mitigate the problem /
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improve
the situation.

To
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begin
with, increased consumption of packaged
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items
is one of the main causes of excessive creation of rubbish.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Companies
nowadays utilize a variety of
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packaging
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materials
such as plastic, polythene, and rubber. Although the
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packaging
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makes
the
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item
more attractive, the
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materials
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used
in preparing packets are
mostly
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non-biodegradable and
they do not decompose. Since the
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packaging
is always discarded, it increases the manufacturing of rubbish.
In addition
to this,
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people
nowadays follow the throwaway culture. As
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companies
are
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now
focusing more on creating
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cheap
and disposable products,
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people
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now
prefer to acquire new things
instead
of reusing and repairing the
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old
ones.
As a result
of this mass consumption of new
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items
, the
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old
and
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used
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items
are discarded
leading to the production of more rubbish.
Ultimately
, such practices cause the production of more non-decomposable garbage.

The solutions are not simple,
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but
they do exist. The
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government
should enact strict laws that force
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companies
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use
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only
bio-degradable
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materials
for
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packaging
purposes.
In addition
to using
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materials
that decompose
easily
, manufacturers should invent new
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packaging
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materials
that can
be recycled
. This will
automatically
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reduce
the amount of waste produced.
Moreover
, the
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government
should encourage
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people
to recycle
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items
that
are made
of plastic, metals and glass
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items
.
For example
, recently I read on Facebook about a beach in Australia, where machines
are installed
and
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people
can
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buy
a food
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item
by
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just
submitting
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used
plastic bottles. These kinds of encouragement activities and
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events
can
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help
in persuading
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people
to recycle.

In conclusion
, although
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many
reasons such as the
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use
of pseudo
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packaging
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materials
and over consumerism contribute towards the increase in waste production, the
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government
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
this growing problem by implementing stringent laws and by promoting recycling.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities Derby and Nottingham Between 2000 and 2009 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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