It is argued by some people that the general health of the populace in the future is expected to worsen compare to the status now. I agree with this notion because the increase in the use of telecommunication devices in the future will promote sedentary lifestyles, while there will be more health complications from the technological bio-products.
Firstly, the use of telecommunication devices discourages an active lifestyles and it is expected to increase in the future. In order words, people may no longer walk outside their homes to interact with their neighbors and friends but rather communicate electronically which will result in a rise in obesity and other associated health complications such as diabetes and coronary heart disease. For example, a recent study by the Nigeria Medical Association identified sedentary lifestyles as a major cause of type 2 diabetes and cardiovascular diseases. Thus, with the projected rise in the use of these devices and the internet for communication, more people may suffer deleterious health problems.
Furthermore, the rise in the bio-products of technology will increase some health problems such as Leukamia and skin cancers. This occur due to harmful radiations emitted during the production and use of various electronics and equipment like Human Scanning machines in airports and mobile phones. For instance, medical experts encouraged a limited use of devices with infra-red radiation due to its harmful effects. Therefore, with the expected raise in technology in the future, more people will be expose to technological by-products that can harm their health.
In conclusion, the standard of health of people in the future is likely to decrease due to the sedentary lifestyles from the projected increase in the use of telecommunication devices and from the by-products of technology which will increase and affect more people.
It
is argued
by
some
people
that the general
health
of the populace in the
future
is
expected
to worsen compare to the status
now
. I
agree
with this notion
because
the
increase
in the
use
of telecommunication
devices
in the
future
will promote sedentary
lifestyles
, while there will be more
health
complications from the technological bio-products.
Firstly
, the
use
of telecommunication
devices
discourages an active
lifestyles
and it is
expected
to
increase
in the
future
. In order words,
people
may no longer walk outside their homes to interact with their neighbors and friends
but
rather
communicate
electronically
which will result in a rise in obesity and other associated
health
complications such as diabetes and coronary heart disease.
For example
, a recent study by the Nigeria Medical Association identified sedentary
lifestyles
as a major cause of type 2 diabetes and cardiovascular diseases.
Thus
, with the projected rise in the
use
of these
devices
and the internet for communication, more
people
may suffer deleterious
health
problems.
Furthermore
, the rise in the bio-products of technology will
increase
some
health
problems such as
Leukamia
and skin cancers.
This occur
due to harmful radiations emitted during the production and
use
of various electronics and equipment like Human Scanning machines in airports and mobile phones.
For instance
, medical experts encouraged a limited
use
of
devices
with infra-red radiation due to its harmful effects.
Therefore
, with the
expected
raise in technology in the
future
, more
people
will be
expose
to technological by-products that can harm their health.
In conclusion
, the standard of
health
of
people
in the
future
is likely to decrease due to the sedentary
lifestyles
from the projected
increase
in the
use
of telecommunication
devices
and from the by-products of technology which will
increase
and
affect
more
people
.
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