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The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in sea What are the reasons and solutions v.1

The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in sea What are the reasons and solutions v. 1
Over the last few decades, the juvenile crime is rapidly increasing. There is often a dichotomy in opinion, on whether, no matter what the age of the offender is, they should be dealt equally or not. I strongly believe that the judicial system must be same for every aspect of people for the major crimes. To begin with, the purpose of the school education is to develop the skills to learn what is good or bad. To put in another way, in the school, the child has been taught regarding the consequences of the wrong doing. For the major crimes, given the leverage to anyone has the detrimental effect on the societies. To illustrate this, let take the example of the “Jhon Marcey” who was charged with the crime of the killing of his own aunt, but has been forgiven due to his young age. In spite of taking this mercy as a golden chance and improve himself as a good citizen, he reoffended the same act of terror by killing the prime witness of the murder in the rage and anger for telling the truth to the jury. Furthermore, the judicial law should be same for every citizen to maintain the decorum of the society, regardless of colour, age or gender. As an illustration, if the offenders forgive on the basis of age, there will be a chance to the same act of violence. Because, he knew that he will be set free in the courtroom again due to his underage. The most compelling example for this could be found in the United States of America, When the state announces the relief on the punishment of teenagers, the amount of offender increase. Although, the underage criminal has been arrested, the jury released them as per the new state law. To summarize, the offender of the major crimes should be treat on the equal-basis regardless of their age for maintaining the decorum of the society
Over the last few decades, the juvenile
crime
is
rapidly
increasing. There is
often
a dichotomy in opinion, on whether, no matter what the
age
of the
offender
is, they should
be dealt
equally
or not. I
strongly
believe that the judicial system
must
be same for every aspect of
people
for the major crimes.

To
begin
with, the purpose of the school education is to develop the
skills
to learn what is
good
or
bad
. To put in another way, in the school, the child has
been taught
regarding the consequences of the
wrong
doing. For the major
crimes
,
given
the leverage to anyone has the detrimental effect on the societies. To illustrate this,
let
take the example of the “
Jhon
Marcey
” who
was charged
with the
crime
of the killing of his
own
aunt,
but
has
been forgiven
due to his young
age
.
In spite of
taking this mercy as a golden chance and
improve
himself as a
good
citizen, he
reoffended
the same act of terror by killing the prime witness of the murder in the rage and anger for telling the truth to the jury.

Furthermore
, the judicial law should be same for every citizen to maintain the decorum of the society, regardless of
colour
,
age
or gender. As an illustration, if the
offenders
forgive on the basis of
age
, there will be a chance to the same act of violence.
Because
, he knew that he will
be set
free in the courtroom again due to his underage. The most compelling example for this could
be found
in the United States of America, When the state announces the relief on the punishment of
teenagers
, the amount of
offender
increase. Although, the underage criminal has
been arrested
, the jury released them as per the new state law.

To summarize
, the
offender
of the major
crimes
should be
treat
on the equal-basis regardless of their
age
for maintaining the decorum of the society
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IELTS essay The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in sea What are the reasons and solutions v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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