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Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. In the not too distant future, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with the statement. v.1

Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. In the not too distant future, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. v. 1
As we can observe the increase in the use of technology in every field, how can education be left behind? . It is extremely beneficial to inculcate latest technology in teaching methods to improve learning and understanding of the students, however, assuming that future classroom to be reliant on technology only would be totally wrong. In this essay I shall discuss that how technology cannot take over future classroom. First of all, it is important to understand that a classroom is a group of students having different learning styles. It is the job of the teacher to identify the needs of an individual hence that needs analyzing potential of every student. This is majorly dependent on the observation of instructor and that cannot be done without having them around. For example, there are millions of lectures conducted through online sessions. Since the interaction is limited between teacher and student, the learning can be compromised. The essence of learning is based on the exchange of ideas and thoughts and that cannot be achieve through online lectures on internet. Another factor that is deeply rooted for learning or teaching in classroom is emotional attachment of the teacher and the student. A teacher can analyze the emotional status of the learner and teach accordingly. For instance, robots are being invented for teaching purpose and can be excellent in teaching but they can never feel the social and emotional status of a student. Thus the robots cannot function the way a teacher can do for their students. In conclusion, it is clear that classrooms equipped with latest inventions can have huge positive impact on students’ learning but assuming that technology would completely takeover classrooms is nearly impossible.
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technology
in every field, how can education be
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left
behind?
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extremely
beneficial to inculcate
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latest
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technology
in
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teaching
methods to
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improve
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learning
and understanding of the
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students
,
however
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technology
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wrong
. In this essay I shall discuss that how
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technology
cannot take over future classroom.

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First of all
, it is
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important
to understand that a classroom is a group of
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students
having
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different
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learning
styles. It is the job of the
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teacher
to identify the needs of an individual
hence
that needs analyzing potential of every
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student
. This is
majorly
dependent on the observation of instructor and that cannot
be done
without having them around.
For example
, there are millions of lectures conducted through online sessions. Since the interaction
is limited
between
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teacher
and
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student
, the
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learning
can
be compromised
. The essence of
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learning
is based
on the exchange of
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ideas
and thoughts and that cannot be
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achieve
through online lectures on internet.

Another factor
that is
deeply
rooted for
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learning
or
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teaching
in classroom is emotional attachment of the
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teacher
and the
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student
. A
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teacher
can analyze the emotional status of the learner and teach
accordingly
.
For instance
, robots are
being invented
for
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teaching
purpose and can be excellent in
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teaching
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but
they can never feel the social and emotional status of a
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student
.
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Thus
the robots cannot function the way a
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teacher
can do for their students.

In conclusion
, it is
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clear
that classrooms equipped with
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latest
inventions can have huge
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positive
impact on
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students’
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learning
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but
assuming that
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technology
would completely takeover classrooms is
nearly
impossible.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. In the not too distant future, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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