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Completing a university education is thought to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Completing a university education is thought to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. v. 1
In today's competitive world, it is challenging to acquire a job. While some people believe that the best approach to start a career is by getting a university degree, others think that gaining experience and developing real life skills is more essential than having a university degree. This essay will discuss both opinions before reaching a conclusion. To begin with, recruiters often write job advertisements that specify that a degree is required for the job; thus, the market decides on this point that it values credentials. In other words, a degree is a start in working life because it will increasingly provide opportunities for further development for the person, and this will reflect on the company's profit. According to a University of California study, they compared two 21-year-old people one of which is a graduate and the other has industrial experience; the comparison revealed that the educated person's ability to learn is much faster than the experienced with no degree. Therefore, education does develop not only the speed of learning, but also the ability to provide for the company in a more quicker method. Despite the explanation mentioned above, practical experience and soft skills give an individual a true understanding of companies mechanics whereas education is theoretical oriented. To illustrate, a degree qualification was once a major deciding factor in who gets the job; however, as more people have obtained credentials, employers have become less impressed, and they are starting to focus on practical experience and people skills. That is because real-life work experience shows that candidates can work well in teams and under pressure; thus, they can adapt quickly and achieve success easily in real-life work environment. In conclusion, the ideal employee is the right combination of both theoretical knowledge and practical understanding. In my opinion, different industries and job roles will favour various attributes; hence, neither is essential the other.
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some
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believe that the best approach to
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start
a career is by getting a university
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degree
, others
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think
that gaining
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experience
and developing real life
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skills
is more essential than having a university
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degree
. This essay will discuss both opinions
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before
reaching a conclusion.

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with, recruiters
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write
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advertisements that specify that a
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degree
is required
for the
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job
;
thus
, the market decides on this point that it values credentials. In
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other
words, a
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degree
is a
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start
in working life
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because
it will
increasingly
provide opportunities for
further
development for the person, and this will reflect on the
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company
's profit. According to a University of California study, they compared two 21-year-
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old
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people
one of which is a graduate and the
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has industrial
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experience
; the comparison revealed that the educated person's ability to learn is much faster than the experienced with no
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degree
.
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, education does develop not
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only
the speed of learning,
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also
the ability to provide for the
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company
in a
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method.

Despite the explanation mentioned above, practical
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experience
and soft
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skills
give an individual a true understanding of
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companies
mechanics whereas education is theoretical oriented. To illustrate, a
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degree
qualification was once a major deciding factor in who
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gets
the
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job
;
however
, as more
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people
have obtained credentials, employers have become less impressed, and they are starting to focus on practical
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experience
and
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people
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skills
.
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because
real-life work
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experience
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shows
that candidates can work well in teams and under pressure;
thus
, they can adapt
quickly
and achieve success
easily
in real-life work environment.

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, the ideal employee is the right combination of both theoretical knowledge and practical understanding. In my opinion,
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different
industries and
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roles will
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various attributes;
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, neither is
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IELTS essay Completing a university education is thought to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6
Overall Band Score
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