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Technologies like AI and Robotics are automating many human jobs and helping to maximize company profits. However, this may result in a new wave of mass unemployment and government should step in to regulate these fields. Discuss arguments for both sides and give your opinion v.1

Technologies like AI and Robotics are automating many human jobs and helping to maximize company profits. However, this may result in a new wave of mass unemployment and government should step in to regulate these fields. Discuss arguments for both sides and give your opinion v. 1
Humans are replaced by machines in work to get increased profit in the company. Yet, this may lead to build joblessness in the country and to overcome from this problem the authority has to take action. I agree that there is an effect in redundancy due to the switching off people with technologies and administration has to step ahead to control over this difficulty. Firstly, this essay will discuss about the merits of machineries and secondly, about its demerits. On the first hand, as the technology improved, the companies swapped the human resource by programming and have been getting a good turn over. It not only reduces the manpower but also saves the time. Further, it leads to provide an increased quantity of production which helps the company to get higher profit. For example, customer care center, which handles all the details of customer identification, their history of complaints and their requirements are provided within a short period of time with a click. On the other hand, due to surge in automation job loss has also risen. Unemployment is a socially undesirable phenomenon. This results in poverty in the nation which will affect the development of the country. To regulate this situation, government has to implement certain norms for the better management of labor as well as for technology innovations. For instance, automation should to be implemented to the recurring activity in nature and for any decision making human has to take charge. To sum up, I agree that due to the replacement of human by machineries there is a huge joblessness in the state which results in poverty. Therefore. The authorities should strive to maintain the balance between the economic needs of citizens as well as technology.
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Humans
are replaced
by machines in work to
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get
increased profit in the
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company
.
Yet
, this may lead to build joblessness in the country and to overcome from this problem the authority
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has to
take action. I
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agree
that there is an effect in redundancy due to the switching off
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people
with
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technologies
and administration
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has to
step ahead to control over this difficulty.
Firstly
, this essay will
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discuss about the
merits of
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machineries
and
secondly
, about its demerits.

On the
first
hand, as the
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technology
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improved
, the
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companies
swapped the
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human
resource by programming and have been getting a
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good
turn over. It not
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only
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reduces
the manpower
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but
also
saves the time.
Further
, it leads to provide an increased quantity of production which
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helps
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
to
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get
higher profit.
For example
, customer care center, which
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handles
all the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
of customer identification, their history of complaints and their requirements
are provided
within a short period of time with a click.

On the other hand
, due to surge in automation job loss has
also
risen. Unemployment is a
socially
undesirable phenomenon. This results in poverty in the nation which will affect the development of the country. To regulate this situation,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
implement certain norms for the better management of labor
as well
as for
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technology
innovations.
For instance
, automation should to
be implemented
to the recurring activity in nature and for any
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decision making
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human
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has to
take charge.

To sum up, I
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agree
that due to the replacement of
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human
by
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machineries
there is a huge joblessness in the state which results in poverty.
Therefore
. The authorities should strive to maintain the balance between the economic needs of citizens
as well
as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Technologies like AI and Robotics are automating many human jobs and helping to maximize company profits. However, this may result in a new wave of mass unemployment and government should step in to regulate these fields. Discuss arguments for both sides and give your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
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