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Teachers used to convey information, but nowwith wide resources of information. Some people think that there is norole forteachers to play in modern education, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.1

Teachers used to convey information, but nowwith wide resources of information. Some people think that there is norole forteachers to play in modern education, others disagree. v. 1
International service is a voluntary transfer of resources from one rustic to another. I disagree with the International gift is a voluntary transfer of resources from one country to another. I disagree with the given statement that governments should not give treatment to poor countries if there are underprivileged people within their own provincial. I believe that the developing and developed countries should always step forward to help the impoverished countries. My first argument is that if unemployment and homelessness are the criteria for not giving service, then there would be no gift on humanitarian grounds at all. Some degree of unemployment and homelessness is there even in the most developed countries such as the USA and the UK. If such countries stop giving benefit, then there would be no one to help the poverty stricken world. For instance, according to statistics of 2013, nearly 6% people in the USA were unemployed, but treatment given by the USA was $30 billion approximately. Even the developing countries such as India have allocated some part of their budget for foreign service. Secondly, most service indirectly helps the donor agrarian, such as for resource extraction from the recipient country or to gain some commercial access. For example, the MNCs opened in India as a part of foreign gift, no doubt, are providing jobs to many youngsters, but in fact is paying them much less than what they have to pay their own country’s employees. Many foreign companies have opened their retail outlets in India because India is a strong commercial market due to its burgeoning population. Therefore, benefit works as a win-win situation for both the giver and the taker countries. To sum up, I reiterate my opinion saying that all countries should help by giving foreign aid, even gift even if there are problems of unemployment and homelessness within them.
International service is a voluntary transfer of resources from one rustic to another. I disagree with the International
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gift
is a voluntary transfer of resources from one
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country
to another. I disagree with the
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given
statement that
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governments
should not give treatment to poor
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countries
if there
are underprivileged
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people
within their
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own
provincial.
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I
believe that the developing and developed
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countries
should always step forward to
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help
the impoverished countries.

My
first
argument is that if unemployment and homelessness are the criteria for not giving service, then there would be no
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gift
on humanitarian grounds at all.
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Some
degree of unemployment and homelessness is there even in the most developed
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countries
such as the USA and the UK. If such
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countries
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stop
giving benefit, then there would be no one to
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help
the
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poverty stricken
world.
For instance
, according to statistics of 2013,
nearly
6%
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people
in the USA
were unemployed
,
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but
treatment
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given
by the USA was $30 billion approximately. Even the developing
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countries
such as India have allocated
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some
part of their budget for
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foreign
service.

Secondly
, most service
indirectly
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helps
the donor agrarian, such as for resource extraction from the recipient
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country
or to gain
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some
commercial access.
For example
, the
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MNCs
opened in India as a part of
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foreign
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gift
, no doubt, are providing jobs to
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many
youngsters,
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but
in fact is paying them much less than what they
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have to
pay their
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own
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country’s
employees.
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Many
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foreign
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companies
have opened their retail outlets in India
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because
India is a strong commercial market due to its burgeoning population.
Therefore
, benefit works as a win-win situation for both the giver and the taker countries.

To sum up, I reiterate my opinion saying that all
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countries
should
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help
by giving
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foreign
aid, even
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gift
even if there are problems of unemployment and homelessness within them.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Teachers used to convey information, but nowwith wide resources of information. Some people think that there is norole forteachers to play in modern education, others disagree. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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