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Task5: Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which of the two solutions from the conversation you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation v.1

Task5: Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which of the two solutions from the conversation you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation v. 1
Meal time was one of the tradition that was the most important point for families; however, in the modern era, people tend to have a meal without their family members. This is mainly because of the hectic pace of modern life and hard to be home at dinner, lunch and breakfast. It has a number of negative impact on individuals and the community. On the one hand, nowadays, traditional way to having a meal together is disappearing. There could be a number of reasons why this is happening. Firstly, the main cause of that is spending less moment with their family, is due to having volume of work. In other word, people are not given a chance to relax with their family owing to busy life. Secondly, someone has a time, however, who thinks that eating alone in a restaurant is much better and saves a time. For instance, in the USA 35 percent of working people having a meal in nearest restaurant or order food from the internet. thus, dinner hour has been changed in not important occasion for the modern families. On the other hand, there are a number of negative effects on a person’s life and the community because of people no longer be together at meal time. The effects of this could be lead to loneliness and less appetite for individual. To illustrate, people who ever have lunch alone is not taking enough food for themselves. So, if having a lunch with people, it can be more interesting to eat. Not only this, human are spending less time with their family could brings drawback to the community. Furthermore, disappearing to have meal would also have a deep impact as it might lead to split families. In conclusion, one of the unwritten traditions, family meal time is almost lost to view due to the hectic pace of modern life and it brings the number of drawbacks in individuals and society. People need to get their priorities right for the family and try to avoid eating out.
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Meal
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time
was one of the tradition that was the most
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important
point for
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families
;
however
, in the
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modern
era,
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people
tend to have a
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meal
without their
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family
members. This is
mainly
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because
of the hectic pace of
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modern
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life
and
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hard
to be home at dinner, lunch and breakfast. It has a
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number
of
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negative
impact on individuals and the community.

On the one hand, nowadays, traditional way to
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having
a
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meal
together is disappearing. There could be a
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number
of reasons why this is happening.
Firstly
, the main cause of
that is
spending less moment with their
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family
, is due to
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having
volume of work. In other word,
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people
are not
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given
a chance to relax with their
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family
owing to busy
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life
.
Secondly
, someone has a
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time
,
however
, who
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thinks
that eating alone in a restaurant is much better and saves a
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time
.
For instance
, in the USA 35 percent of working
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people
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having
a
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meal
in
A determiner is probably missing here: "the nearest".
nearest
restaurant or order food from the internet.
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thus
, dinner hour has been
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changed
in not
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important
occasion for the
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modern
families.

On the other hand
, there are a
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number
of
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negative
effects on a person’s
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life
and the community
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because
of
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people
no longer be together at
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meal
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time
. The effects of this could be lead to loneliness and less appetite for individual. To illustrate,
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people
who ever have lunch alone is not taking
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enough
food for themselves.
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So
, if
When we speak of types of meals, the article is not required: "having lunch".
having a lunch
with
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people
, it can be more interesting to eat. Not
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only
this, human are spending less
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time
with their
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family
could
The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: "bring"
brings
drawback to the community.
Furthermore
, disappearing to have
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meal
would
also
have a deep impact as it might lead to split families.

In conclusion
, one of the unwritten traditions,
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family
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meal
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time
is almost lost to view due to the hectic pace of
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modern
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life
and it brings the
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number
of drawbacks in individuals and society.
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People
need to
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get
their priorities right for the
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family
and try to avoid eating out.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Task5: Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which of the two solutions from the conversation you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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