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Task 5: Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which of the two solutions from the conversation you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. v.1

Task 5: Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which of the two solutions from the conversation you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. v. 1
There has been growing momentum in recent years towards movements for children starting school after the life of 7. In my opinion, although going to educational institution from a young youth will help with social development, children should be allowed to grow outside institution until the age of 7. Proponents of early schooling often point out the clinical research on the impact of school on social skills. At home, children are exposed to a variety of different circumstances. They may or may not have siblings, their parents might take them out often or neglect them at home, hampering their social skills. Once children start school, they are all in more or less an equal environment where they must communicate with older and younger children, compromise when playing, learn to listen to their teachers, and start forming stable bonds based on empathy and shared interests with others. Despite the social advantages, children can develop more uniquely if they are allowed to delay their entrance to formal schooling. A good example of this is in Finland, where students do not begin school until after the age of 7. Finland is renowned for its top-performing students, but this can be traced to a number of factors besides simply youth. However, the impact on individual development is apparent. According to research in child psychology, children form the basis of their personality between the ages of 4 and 7. Therefore it is paramount to delay the age when they begin school in order to give them room to breath and ultimately produce a greater variety of voices in society at large as has been the case in Finland. In my opinion, the social benefits of faculty do not outweigh the individual positives of delayed schooling to both the individual and society. Schools should continue to research this area so that they can better advise policymakers.
There has been growing momentum in recent years towards movements for
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help
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development,
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children
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allowed
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age
of 7.

Proponents of early schooling
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point out the clinical research on the impact of
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on
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social
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skills
. At home,
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children
are exposed
to a variety of
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different
circumstances. They may or may not have siblings, their parents might take them out
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often
or neglect them at home, hampering their
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social
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skills
. Once
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children
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start
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school
, they are all in more or less an equal environment where they
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must
communicate with older and younger
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children
, compromise when playing, learn to listen to their teachers, and
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start
forming stable bonds based on empathy and shared interests with others.

Despite the
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social
advantages,
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children
can develop more
uniquely
if they are
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allowed
to delay their entrance to formal schooling. A
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example of this is in Finland, where students do not
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begin
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school
until after the
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age
of 7. Finland
is renowned
for its top-performing students,
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but
this can
be traced
to a number of factors
besides
simply
youth.
However
, the impact on individual development is apparent. According to research in child psychology,
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children
form the basis of their personality between the
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ages
of 4 and 7.
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Therefore
it is paramount to delay the
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age
when they
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begin
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school
in order to give them room to breath and
ultimately
produce a greater variety of voices in society at large as has been the case in Finland.

In my opinion, the
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social
benefits of faculty do not outweigh the individual positives of delayed schooling to both the individual and society.
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Schools
should continue to research this area
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so
that they can better advise policymakers.
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IELTS essay Task 5: Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which of the two solutions from the conversation you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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