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Task 3: The man express his opinion about the plan described in the article. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state his opinion about the plan and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v.1

Task 3: The man express his opinion about the plan described in the article. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state his opinion about the plan and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
Some people argue that computers serve better than libraries while enhancing the knowledge and wisdom and also mentioned that libraries are unnecessary resources and waste of budget to invest in them. This essay will discuss about the both views. However, I strongly believe that book knowledge is better than computer information. To begin with the one notion, there are myriad things taken into consideration of its favour. Firstly, the library plays a crucial role in the student education system either in school or at the university. They have enormous books, articles and magazines that help students to foster their skills in the specific topic that related to their study curriculum. Secondly, libraries are able to produce peaceful atmosphere, which maintains a strict rules and regulations to follow, that creates an attractive environment for study rather than any other places. Computers, on the other hand, have also significant in the student career, which benefits them by providing quick response to any problem. Another essential is that computers can perform complex tasks and gives an accurate solution that books are unable to do. Furthermore, computers are able to upload online lectures, tutorials about different lectures that necessary for students, if they are not attending any of them through offline classes. By discussing the both views, both libraries and computers have different abilities that are not comparing between them. I believe that, the information that provides by online have some flaws that posted by anonymous people, while books have truthful answers which written by professors who have profound values and prolific experience. To conclude that, I reiterate my statement by saying that, although computers respond quickly to the any question that we made, but book knowledge is undeniable because it authorised by well known people.
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Some
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people
argue that computers serve better than libraries while enhancing the knowledge and wisdom and
also
mentioned that libraries are unnecessary resources and waste of budget to invest in them. This essay will
Did you mean simply "discuss the"? You do not need the word "about" here.
discuss about the
both views.
However
, I
strongly
believe that
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book
knowledge is better than computer information.

To
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begin
with the one notion, there are myriad things
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taken into consideration of
its
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favour
.
Firstly
, the library plays a crucial role in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
education system either in school or at the university. They have enormous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
, articles and magazines that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to foster their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
in the specific topic that related to their study curriculum.
Secondly
, libraries are able to produce peaceful atmosphere, which maintains a strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations to follow, that creates an attractive environment for study
rather
than any other places.

Computers,
on the other hand
, have
also
significant in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
career, which benefits them by providing quick response to any problem. Another essential is that computers can perform complex tasks and gives an accurate solution that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
are unable to do.
Furthermore
, computers are able to upload online lectures, tutorials about
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different
lectures that necessary for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
, if they are not attending any of them through offline classes.

By discussing the both views, both libraries and computers have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
abilities that are not comparing between them. I believe that, the information that provides by online have
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some
flaws that posted by anonymous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
have truthful answers which written by professors who have profound values and prolific experience.

To conclude
that, I reiterate my statement by saying that, although computers respond
quickly
to the any question that we made,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
knowledge is undeniable
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because
it
Possible spelling mistake. 'authorised' is British English.
authorised
by well known
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people
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Learning is a treasure that will follow its owner everywhere.
Chinese Proverb

IELTS essay Task 3: The man express his opinion about the plan described in the article. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state his opinion about the plan and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
292 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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