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The man expresses his opinion about the plan described in the article. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state his opinion about the plan and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v.1

The man expresses his opinion about the plan described in the article. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state his opinion about the plan and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
It has been observed that married couples in some countries prefer to have children at an older age these days as compared to the past. The main cause of this trend is delayed marriages to achieve stability in life. In my opinion, having children at later stages is disadvantaged due to an increased propensity to newborn abnormalities born to older mothers and less energetic parents to take care of the youngsters, and these outweigh the basic benefit of stability in the life The main reason for couples to conceive at an older age is delayed marriages. People want to excel in their professional careers and want financial stability before starting married life. This is due to the growing economic needs in the modern world and people cannot meet the financial requirements of a wedded life without getting adequate jobs, however, this requires extra time. Moreover, even in cases of weddings at young ages, husband and wife prefer to have kids after getting adequate financial stability in life by excelling in their respective professions. Admittedly, despite having a stable life by conceiving late, there are some serious ramifications to consider by married couples. One serious drawback is that increased age of the mother at the time of conception enhances the chances of fetal abnormalities. In other words, newborns of an older mother, as compared to the young one, are more likely to have congenital abnormalities. For example, a recent article published in The Times revealed that 45 % of children having congenital heart defects were born to mothers aged 40 or more in the UK. Another important drawback is that it becomes difficult to raise the kids owing to less energetic parents during the later ages of life. Rearing kids is a cumbersome process and requires immense physical and mental efforts and gets difficult as the parents grow old. In conclusion, people get married at older ages to achieve stability in life acts as a main cause of the delayed conception by the parents, however, the serious drawbacks of having kids at later stages far outweigh the basic benefit of a stable life.
It has
been observed
that married couples in
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some
countries prefer to have children at an
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older
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age
these days as compared to the past. The main cause of this trend
is delayed
marriages to achieve
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stability
in
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life
. In my opinion,
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having
children at later stages
is disadvantaged
due to an increased propensity to newborn abnormalities born to
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older
mothers and less energetic
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parents
to take care of the youngsters, and these outweigh the basic benefit of
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stability
in the life

The main reason for couples to conceive at an
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older
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age
is delayed
marriages.
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People
want to excel in their professional careers and want financial
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stability
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before
starting married
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life
. This is due to the growing economic needs in the modern world and
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people
cannot
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meet
the financial requirements of a wedded
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life
without getting adequate jobs,
however
, this requires extra time.
Moreover
, even in cases of weddings at young
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ages
, husband and wife prefer to have
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kids
after getting adequate financial
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stability
in
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life
by excelling in their respective professions.

Admittedly
, despite
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having
a stable
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life
by conceiving late, there are
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some
serious ramifications to consider by married couples. One serious drawback is that increased
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age
of the
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mother
at the time of conception enhances the chances of fetal abnormalities.
In other words
, newborns of an
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older
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mother
, as compared to the young one, are more likely to have congenital abnormalities.
For example
, a recent article published in The Times revealed that 45 % of children
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having
congenital heart defects
were born
to mothers aged 40 or more in the UK. Another
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important
drawback is that it becomes difficult to raise the
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kids
owing to less energetic
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parents
during the later
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ages
of
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life
. Rearing
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kids
is a cumbersome process and requires immense physical and mental efforts and
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gets
difficult as the
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parents
grow
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old
.

In conclusion
,
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people
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get
married at
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older
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ages
to achieve
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stability
in
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life
acts as a main cause of the delayed conception by the
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parents
,
however
, the serious drawbacks of
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having
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kids
at later stages far outweigh the basic benefit of a stable
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life
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The man expresses his opinion about the plan described in the article. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state his opinion about the plan and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
352 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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