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1. WHERE DO YOU WATCH tv programs/shows? (why/why not)2. What is your favorite tv programs/shows? (why/why not)3. Are there any tv programs/shows you do not like watching? (why/why not)4. Will you watch more or fewer programs/shows in future? (why/why not) v.1

1. WHERE DO YOU WATCH tv programs/shows? (why/why not)2. What is your favorite tv programs/shows? (why/why not)3. Are there any tv programs/shows you do not like watching? (why/why not)4. Will you watch more or fewer programs/shows in future? (why/why not) v. 1
Many people have abandoned traditional way to buy products. These days popular way of shopping is online and it is rising. In my opinion, I believe this have increased problem to our surroundings and also many people are losing jobs. To begin with, Due to rise of live shopping has seriously damaged the atmosphere. People are buying products which are packaged and shipped using single use plastic. Upon receiving product online the packing material which cannot be reused or recycled is thrown in the open air. The small lake and river within the country are damaging the marine environment as the sea creature are badly affected by it. For instance, recent research concluded, 90% of waste material found is the plastic accumulated which is from the popular online retailer store Amazon, EBay and Flipchart. Furthermore, Web- based shopping has not only affected the atmosphere, but also most people got unemployed. Earlier traditional form of purchasing was desired by many individual. But due to emergence of live shopping all the shops in the locality are closed as people are not visiting their store to make a purchase. Another reason is the online retailer do not have huge overheads related to staff and office expenditure and hence they offer huge discounts to the people. General public saves huge amount on offers and discount they prefer using this latest method of shopping on the internet. For example, as per a recent survey conducted by a new magazine, it stated that, more than 85% person of people in the year use online platform and subsequently 60% of traditional store are closed due to no trade. In conclusion, Littering and the effect of marine creature is the consequence of online shopping material and conversely unemployed has increased.
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have abandoned traditional way to
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buy
products. These days popular way of
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shopping
is
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online
and it is rising. In my opinion, I believe
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this have
increased problem to our surroundings and
also
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many
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people
are losing jobs.

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begin
with, Due to rise of
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live
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shopping
has
seriously
damaged the atmosphere.
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People
are buying products which
are packaged
and shipped using single
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use
plastic. Upon receiving product
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online
the packing material which cannot
be reused
or recycled
is thrown
in the open air. The
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small
lake and river within the country are damaging the marine environment as the sea creature are
badly
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affected
by it.
For instance
, recent research concluded, 90% of waste material found is the plastic accumulated which is from the popular
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online
retailer store Amazon,
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EBay
and
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Flipchart
.

Furthermore
, Web- based
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shopping
has not
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only
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affected
the atmosphere,
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also
most
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people
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got
unemployed. Earlier traditional form of purchasing
was desired
by
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many
individual.
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But
due to emergence of
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live
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shopping
all the shops in the locality
are closed
as
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people
are not visiting their store to
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make
a
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purchase
. Another reason is the
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online
retailer do not have huge overheads related to staff and office expenditure and
hence
they offer huge discounts to the
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people
.
Consider using "public".
General public
saves huge amount on offers and discount they prefer using this latest method of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
on the internet.
For example
, as per a recent survey conducted by a new magazine, it stated that, more than 85% person of
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people
in the year
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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online
platform and
subsequently
60% of traditional store
are closed
due to no trade.

In conclusion
, Littering and the effect of marine creature is the consequence of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
material and
conversely
unemployed has increased.
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IELTS essay 1. WHERE DO YOU WATCH tv programs/shows? (why/why not)2. What is your favorite tv programs/shows? (why/why not)3. Are there any tv programs/shows you do not like watching? (why/why not)4. Will you watch more or fewer programs/shows in future? (why/why not) v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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