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Task 2 Essay: (250 Words)Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree? v.2

Task 2 Essay: (250 Words)Life was better when technology was simpler. v. 2
It is argued that when technology was simpler, life was better. I totally disagree with this statement; technology makes our life easier and simpler than before. This essay shows how life becomes better by using technology. Firstly, technology is playing an essential role in our life. Not only does it make communication between family members more easy but also it helps them to feel safe, even though they are far away from each other. Mobile applications and social media are assisting people to contact anyone, even though they are not in the same place, or they are not in the same country. For instance, in 1998 when I was working at Gulf countries, it was hard to contact my family; however, now it is really easy to call my family anytime, or see them by using mobile applications. Secondly, getting information for any life aspects is faster than the old days. It is the fact that, World Wide Web improves our lives by providing us with the required answers by a simple click on the keyboard. For instance, if I want to get information about something, I will go to internet and google it, but in the past, I had to visit a library to search in books in order to get the needed information. Moreover, the invention of Internet helps us on education. To illustrate, I live in Saudi Arabia; I took an online IELTS course with a teacher who lives in Egypt without the need of travelling there. In conclusion, in the modern era, the power of technology has been shifted the balance from the hands of a few to the masses, which helps the people on communication, education, and gaining information by easiest ways. It no doubt that technology makes our lives better.
It
is argued
that when
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technology
was simpler,
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life
was better. I
totally
disagree with this statement;
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technology
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makes
our
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life
easier and simpler than
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before
. This essay
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shows
how
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life
becomes better by using technology.

Firstly
,
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technology
is playing an essential role in our
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life
. Not
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only
does it
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make
communication between family members more easy
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but
also
it
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helps
them to feel safe,
even though
they are far away from each other. Mobile applications and social media are assisting
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people
to contact anyone,
even though
they are not in the same place, or they are not in the same country.
For instance
, in 1998 when I was working at Gulf countries, it was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to contact my family;
however
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
it is
really
easy to call my family anytime, or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
them by using mobile applications.

Secondly
, getting
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information
for any
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life
aspects is faster than the
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old
days. It is the fact that, World Wide Web
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improves
our
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lives
by providing us with the required answers by a simple click on the keyboard.
For instance
, if I want to
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get
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information
about something, I will go to internet and google it,
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but
in the past, I had to visit a library to search in books in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the needed
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information
.
Moreover
, the invention of Internet
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helps
us on education. To illustrate, I
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live
in Saudi Arabia; I took an online IELTS course with a teacher who
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lives
in Egypt without the need of travelling there.

In conclusion
, in the modern era, the power of
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technology
has
been shifted
the balance from the hands of a few to the masses, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
on communication, education, and gaining
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
by easiest ways. It no doubt that
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technology
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
our
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lives
better.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Task 2 Essay: (250 Words)Life was better when technology was simpler. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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