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Task 2: Countries should try to produce all the food for the population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Task 2: Countries should try to produce all the food for the population and import as little food as possible. v. 2
Many people are wedded to the idea that nations should attempt to manufacture all food sources to meet the demand for their own domestic use and minimize the import of these items, in order that the prosperity of countries will be maintained. Personally, I wholly agree with this opinion. It is widely acknowledged that there are two prime reasons behind the self-production of local food in many regions comprise a huge benefit. The fundamental reason is that when stimulating local residents to produce all their food, the government will allocate a great amount of money to improve their technology. The integration of cutting-edge technology into agriculture sector is extremely essential because it accelerates the input materials for the food manufacturing industry. Additionally, accompanying with the development of agriculture, the unemployed rate will be mitigated which may exerts a positive effect on the vigorous growth of local economy. China perfectly exemplifies this circumstance, the government always try to encourage domestic food production, thereby creating more jobs for their citizens. I strongly believe that any countries should alleviate the amount of imported food. Firstly, in many nations people have a tendency to choose some kinds of food which are imported from overseas countries due to the lack of their cognitive abilities. For example, in Vietnam citizens tend to buy imported food instead of local products because they believe that the quality of these items is superior to the commodities in their countries. Consequently, it may pose an adverse threat to the domestic food products. In conclusion, I completely agree that the local authorities should figure out some optimal solution to facilitate the monopoly of their local food as well as restrict the amount of food imported into the inland.
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people
are wedded
to the
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idea
that nations should attempt to manufacture all
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food
sources to
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meet
the demand for their
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own
domestic
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use
and minimize the import of these items, in order that the prosperity of
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countries
will
be maintained
.
Personally
, I wholly
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agree
with this opinion.

It is
widely
acknowledged that there are two prime reasons behind the self-production of
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local
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food
in
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many
regions comprise a huge benefit. The fundamental reason is that when stimulating
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local
residents to produce all their
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food
, the
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government
will allocate a great amount of money to
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improve
their technology. The integration of cutting-edge technology into agriculture sector is
extremely
essential
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because
it accelerates the input materials for the
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food
manufacturing industry.
Additionally
,
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accompanying with
the development of agriculture, the unemployed rate will
be mitigated
which may exerts a
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positive
effect on the vigorous growth of
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local
economy. China
perfectly
exemplifies this circumstance, the
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government
always try to encourage domestic
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food
production, thereby creating more jobs for their citizens.

I
strongly
believe that any
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countries
should alleviate the amount of
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imported
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food
.
Firstly
, in
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many
nations
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people
have a tendency to choose
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some
kinds of
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food
which are
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imported
from overseas
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countries
due to the lack of their cognitive abilities.
For example
, in Vietnam citizens tend to
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buy
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imported
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food
instead
of
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local
products
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because
they believe that the quality of these items is superior to the commodities in their
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countries
.
Consequently
, it may pose an adverse threat to the domestic
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food
products.

In conclusion
, I completely
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agree
that the
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local
authorities should figure out
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some
optimal solution to facilitate the monopoly of their
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local
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food
as well
as restrict the amount of
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food
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imported
into the inland.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Task 2: Countries should try to produce all the food for the population and import as little food as possible. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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