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some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. v. 5
it is a common belief that countries all over the world should have self-sufficient supply rather than import food from other countries. While some people agree that the country should try to produce their food for themselves instead of getting foods from overseas countries. However, I cannot entirely agree with the given statement. On the one hand, some people argue that a country should try to make plenty of to reserve for their dwellers because of some factors. First of all, ensuring quality products that they consume. For instance, people can know the food resources or those products whether it is good or bad. Moreover, the self-sufficient supply can help cut the waste of foods in the world. For example, when the farmer grows plants. Afterward, they seek seeds to reserve for the next term without buying seeds. Nevertheless, I believe that the self-sufficient supply can bring some downside. Firstly, it is not suitable for all the countries in the world. For example, some countries had been desertification and drought. Therefore, they cannot grow plants. Secondly, it does not benefit the global economy. For instance, when a country does not react with another country in the world, it can be isolation. This will reduce their economy and lag behind compared with the world. In summarize, while some people think that their country does not need to import foods or goods from foreign countries because they can grow foods and produce all the food for themselves. However, I disagree with this because this will bring some drawbacks and not suitable in some countries
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all over the
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world
should have self-sufficient supply
rather
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food
from other
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countries
. While
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country
should try to produce their
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food
for themselves
instead
of getting
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foods
from overseas
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.
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statement.

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argue that a
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country
should try to
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plenty
of to reserve for their dwellers
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of
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factors.
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,
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can know the
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food
resources or those products whether it is
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or
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.
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, the self-sufficient supply can
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help
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cut
the waste of
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foods
in the
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world
.
For example
, when the farmer grows plants. Afterward, they seek seeds to reserve for the
next
term without buying seeds.

Nevertheless
, I believe that the self-sufficient supply can bring
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some
downside.
Firstly
, it is not suitable for all the
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countries
in the
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world
.
For example
,
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some
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countries
had been desertification and drought.
Therefore
, they cannot grow plants.
Secondly
, it does not benefit the global economy.
For instance
, when a
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country
does not react with another
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country
in the
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world
, it can be isolation. This will
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reduce
their economy and lag behind compared with the world.

In summarize, while
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think
that their
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country
does not need to import
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foods
or
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goods
from foreign
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countries
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because
they can grow
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foods
and produce all the
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food
for themselves.
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, I disagree with this
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because
this will bring
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drawbacks and not suitable in
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countries
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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