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Task 2 As the number of cars increases more money has to be spent on road systems Some people think the government should pay for this Others however think that the user should cover the costs Discuss and give your opinion v.1

Task 2 As the number of cars increases more money has to be spent on road systems Some people think the government should pay for this Others however think that the user should cover the costs Discuss and give your opinion v. 1
All around the world, increasing is populace is one of the most alarming concerns. We are running out of natural resources to fulfill the basic needs of these people like food, shelter and clothing. Few commentators believe that new colonies and houses could be created in the countryside while others are of the opinion that it is crucial to protect it. In my opinion, some parts of the countryside could be used for building new homes and colonies. The pace at which the community has increased is really daunting. The amount of natural resources being used is unimaginable. People who believe, it is important to protect the countryside are of such belief because urbanization has had a deteriorating effect on our environment. The construction of colonies requires plenty of space which was created by cutting down forests and destroying the natural habitat of many species. Moreover, people in the cities prefer private transport to commute from one place to another which emits carbon dioxide in the environment and has started affecting the health of residents. However, the building of new homes in some of the parts the land would have more benefits. The rural area would have better education and healthcare facilities. Alongside this, it would also create some job opportunities for local people who could be employed as watchmen or maids for working in the homes. The distribution of the population would be even and have less burden on cities. For example, if some people could be accommodated in rural areas, pollution levels and traffic congestion would be less in cities. Clean air and scenic views of the terrain could make life more pleasant and less stressful than in the cities. To conclude, in my opinion, governments should have well-planned construction plans to minimize the damage to the environment and evenly distribute the population in cities and countryside to attain the best results of constructing new homes in rural areas.
All around the world, increasing is populace is one of the most alarming concerns. We are running out of natural resources to fulfill the basic needs of these
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people
like food, shelter and clothing. Few commentators believe that
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new
colonies and
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houses
could
be created
in the
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countryside
while others are of the opinion that it is crucial to protect it. In my opinion,
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some
parts of the
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countryside
could be
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used
for building
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new
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homes
and colonies.

The pace at which the community has increased is
really
daunting. The amount of natural resources being
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used
is unimaginable.
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People
who believe, it is
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important
to protect the
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countryside
are of such belief
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because
urbanization has had a deteriorating effect on our environment. The construction of colonies requires
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plenty
of space which
was created
by cutting down forests and destroying the natural habitat of
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many
species.
Moreover
,
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people
in the
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cities
prefer private transport to commute from one place to another which emits carbon dioxide in the environment and has
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started
affecting the health of residents.

However
, the building of
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new
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homes
in
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some of the
parts the land would have more benefits. The rural area would have better education and healthcare facilities. Alongside this, it would
also
create
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some
job opportunities for local
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people
who could
be employed
as watchmen or maids for working in the
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homes
. The distribution of the population would be even and have less burden on
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cities
.
For example
, if
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some
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people
could
be accommodated
in rural areas, pollution levels and traffic congestion would be less in
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cities
. Clean air and scenic views of the terrain could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
life more pleasant and less stressful than in the cities.

To conclude
, in my opinion,
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governments
should have well-planned construction plans to minimize the damage to the environment and
evenly
distribute the population in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countryside
to attain the best results of constructing
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new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homes
in rural areas.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Task 2 As the number of cars increases more money has to be spent on road systems Some people think the government should pay for this Others however think that the user should cover the costs Discuss and give your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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