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Nowadays people are purchasing more than they need. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Give your opinion and examples based on your experience and knowledge. v.1

Nowadays people are purchasing more than they need. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Give your opinion and examples based on your experience and knowledge. v. 1
Gender equality has come a long way in the working environment. There are certain people who argue that woman have equal rights as men and should be given the same opportunities. However, this is refuted by others who feel that women are not able to perform various tasks which men can do. This essay will discuss why women are capable of doing the same work as men and if give the chance, produce better results. Although jobs that require heavy lifting are usually given to men; this is due to the perception that women are weak and fragile. They are justifiably worried about the health and safety of women more than men. For example, in the aviation industry, there are tasks which supervisors will only issue to men because the stain and workload with little to no supervision, however, if that same work is given to a woman, he/she will be there to make sure it is done well in a safe environment. As a result, women are restricted to doing less meaningful duties as opposed to the male gender. Nonetheless, the use of technology as bridged the gap, and simplified the use of manpower to perform any task. Making it possible for women to participate in any complex and stressful work. Because of discrimination in the workforce, women prove themselves by their ability to multitask and work in any harsh environment. They tend to approach their responsibilities in a different way compared to men with better precision and care, making them better leaders. For instance, in Nigeria, 60% of businesses with female executives have been successful in the past seven years. Hence, women are able to adapt to any situation in other ways, making them able to compete with men. In conclusion, it can be said that both men and women are blessed with individual gifts in certain areas, and by looking at the current situation, it will be unreasonable to believe that they cannot do each other's job.
Gender equality has
come
a long way in the working environment. There are certain
people
who argue that woman have equal rights as
men
and should be
given
the same opportunities.
However
, this
is refuted
by others who feel that
women
are not able to perform various tasks which
men
can do. This essay will discuss why
women
are capable of doing the same work as
men
and if give the chance, produce better results.

Although jobs that require heavy lifting are
usually
given
to
men
; this is due to the perception that
women
are weak and fragile. They are
justifiably
worried about the health and safety of
women
more than
men
.
For example
, in the aviation industry, there are tasks which supervisors will
only
issue to
men
because
the stain and workload with
little
to no supervision,
however
, if that same work is
given
to a woman, he/she will be there to
make
sure it
is done
well in a safe environment.
As a result
,
women
are restricted
to doing less meaningful duties as opposed to the male gender. Nonetheless, the
use
of technology as bridged the gap, and simplified the
use
of manpower to perform any task. Making it possible for
women
to participate in any complex and stressful work.

Because
of discrimination in the workforce,
women
prove themselves by their ability to multitask and work in any harsh environment. They tend to approach their responsibilities in a
different
way compared to
men
with better precision and care, making them better leaders.
For instance
, in Nigeria, 60% of businesses with female executives have been successful in the past seven years.
Hence
,
women
are able to adapt to any situation in other ways, making them able to compete with
men
.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that both
men
and
women
are blessed
with individual gifts in certain areas, and by looking at the
current
situation, it will be unreasonable to believe that they cannot do each other's job.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays people are purchasing more than they need. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Give your opinion and examples based on your experience and knowledge. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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