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Talk about the food that you like to eat outside your home. Please say- What is it? - Why do you like it? - On what occasions do you eat out? - How often do you do it? v.1

Talk about the food that you like to eat outside your home. Please say- What is it? - Why do you like it? - On what occasions do you eat out? - How often do you do it? v. 1
Common men and women try to imitate renowned people by knowing them through magazines or television. The primary reason for this trend is that people's intense desire to look exactly like them, and this essay would argue that this is not a good idea because it would increase the general spending nature of people. One justification for people's habit to copy famous individuals is that they want to look similar to their favourite persons. This is because famous people proved themselves in front of the world, and their excellence is appreciated by all humankind around the world. Therefore, it encourages men and women to adopt their lifestyle, and when they follow at least dressing style, it would enhance their confidence to face to face the society. For example, a recent survey conducted by the BBC revealed that 72% of younger generation prefer to copy their admired celebrities because they think this would escalate their self-esteem in order to face others. However, I believe that imitating famous people is a negative tendency because this would affect the purchasing habit of common people by increasing their monthly expenses. That is to say that the majority of popular film stars or musicians use branded items, and the general public cannot afford these items on a daily basis from their meagre salaries. If they do this, they often incur into debt through unnecessary spending. For instance, a recent research carried out by the Times Of India showed that a 32% of common persons get into debt by purchasing branded clothes and other things, just to imitate their favourite celebrities. In conclusion, nowadays, people like to follow many famous people either by reading books or watching TV because they prefer to address them in a similar way that their favourite people do, and I opine that this is not a nice idea as it increases the general spending nature of common individuals.
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men
and women try to imitate renowned
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people
by knowing them through magazines or television. The primary reason for this trend is that
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people
's intense desire to look exactly like them, and this essay would argue that this is not a
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good
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idea
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because
it would increase the general spending nature of
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people
.

One justification for
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people
's habit to copy
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famous
individuals is that they want to look similar to their
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favourite
persons. This is
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because
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famous
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people
proved themselves in front of the world, and their excellence
is appreciated
by all humankind around the world.
Therefore
, it encourages
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men
and women to adopt their lifestyle, and when they follow at least dressing style, it would enhance their confidence
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to face to face
the society.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by the BBC revealed that 72% of younger generation prefer to copy their admired celebrities
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because
they
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think
this would escalate their self-esteem in order to face others.

However
, I believe that imitating
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famous
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people
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is
a
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negative
tendency
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because
this would affect the purchasing habit of
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common
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people
by increasing their monthly expenses.
That is
to say that the majority of popular film stars or musicians
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use
branded items, and the
Consider using "public".
general public
cannot afford these items on a daily basis from their
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meagre
salaries. If they do this, they
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often
incur into debt through unnecessary spending.
For instance
, a recent research carried out by
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the Times Of India
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showed
that a 32% of
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common
persons
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get
into debt by purchasing branded clothes and other things,
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just
to imitate their
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favourite
celebrities.

In conclusion
, nowadays,
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people
like to follow
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many
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famous
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people
either by reading books or watching TV
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because
they prefer to address them
Consider replacing "in a similar way" with the adverb for "similar"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a similar way
that their
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favourite
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people
do, and I opine that this is not a nice
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idea
as it increases the general spending nature of
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common
individuals.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Talk about the food that you like to eat outside your home. Please say- What is it? - Why do you like it? - On what occasions do you eat out? - How often do you do it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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