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Talk about your best friend at school. Please say- Who is he/she? - What are your similarities? - Did your friendship continue for a long time? Why? v.1

Talk about your best friend at school. Please say- Who is he/she? - What are your similarities? - Did your friendship continue for a long time? Why? v. 1
A high number of traffic is a major issue in most of the big cities and towns all of the planet earth. The main reasons this happens is a big figure of vehicles on the roads and the viable solution is to increase the public transportation facilities. The increased amount of private automobiles is one the main causes of huge traffic. It is very easy to buy a new car because of the bank's loan scheme and instalment payment and people are buying too many of them. As the number of vehicles is increasing, however, the roads are not. As per the study, every contemporary metropolis need twenty five percentages of its land area for roads which is not a common practice in most countries. As a result, people are spending too much time on commuting. For example, capital city Manila in the Philippines, where it takes more than four hours to travel around twelve kilometres. To tackle this problem the government should implement a better public transportation system as well as rules on buying new cars and more taxes while driving in a major metropolitan area. Most of the cities do not a modern transportation infrastructure and people totally rely on personal vehicles. As per the latest survey in the Philippines, people think if the metro railway was good, they would not take out their cars in the capital. In addition to the modernization of the public transport, the government should impose rules on buying more than one car per house as well as include high taxes while driving in the city centre. For example, we could talk about Singapore and the U. K. In Singapore, people need an approval for the authority before buy a vehicle and in the U. K people pay extra tax when they drive in London. Both countries have a minimum level of traffic mess. In conclusion, big and contemporary cities of the world are having traffic issues because of the high registration of new automobiles and less number of roads to support this demand, but it can be solved by the implementation of the public transport system and taxes on buying a new car and driving in the city.
A high number of
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traffic
is a major issue in most of the
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big
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cities
and towns
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all of the
planet earth. The main reasons this happens is a
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big
figure of
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vehicles
on the
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roads
and the viable solution is to increase the
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public
transportation facilities.

The increased amount of private automobiles is
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one
the main causes of huge
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traffic
. It is
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very
easy to
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buy
a
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new
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car
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because
of the bank's loan scheme and
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instalment
payment and
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people
are
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buying
too
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many
of them. As the number of
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vehicles
is increasing,
however
, the
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roads
are not. As per the study, every contemporary metropolis need
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twenty five
percentages of its land area for
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roads
which is not a common practice in most countries.
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As
a result,
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people
are spending too much time on commuting.
For example
, capital city Manila in the Philippines, where it takes more than four hours to travel around twelve
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kilometres
.

To tackle this problem the
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government
should implement a better
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public
transportation system
as well
as
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rules
on
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buying
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new
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cars
and more
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taxes
while driving in a major metropolitan area. Most of the
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cities
do not a modern transportation infrastructure and
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people
totally
rely on personal
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vehicles
. As per the latest survey in the Philippines,
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people
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think
if the metro railway was
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good
, they would not take out their
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cars
in the capital.
In addition
to the modernization of the
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public
transport, the
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government
should impose
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rules
on
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buying
more than one
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car
per
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house
as well
as include high
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taxes
while driving in the city
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centre
.
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, we could talk about Singapore and the U. K. In Singapore,
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people
need an approval for the authority
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before
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buy
a
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vehicle
and in the U. K
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people
pay extra
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tax
when they drive in London. Both countries have a minimum level of
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traffic
mess.

In conclusion
,
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big
and contemporary
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cities
of the world are having
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traffic
issues
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because
of the high registration of
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new
automobiles and less number of
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roads
to support this demand,
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but
it can
be solved
by the implementation of the
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public
transport system and
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taxes
on
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buying
a
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new
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car
and driving in the city.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Talk about your best friend at school. Please say- Who is he/she? - What are your similarities? - Did your friendship continue for a long time? Why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
366 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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