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Talk about something that was made with your own hands for your friend or relative. Please say- What was it? - How did you make it? - What was the response when he/she received it? v.1

Talk about something that was made with your own hands for your friend or relative. Please say- What was it? - How did you make it? - What was the response when he/she received it? v. 1
In the era of automated systems and robotics, it is evident that many manual jobs disappeared from the work market. In this case, the idea of reducing working hours has prompted in the society. This essay will explain the pros and cons of bringing the working hours down in the details and give evidence as to why this initiative does not have a positive effect on society. To begin, bringing down the working hours is a key to the people's freedom because they are exempted of the duties and responsibilities they have when they sign a contract. Therefore, if, for instance, the working days were reduced to two days a week, it would give to people a huge amount of time, which they could use for their personal affairs, learning, leisure or creativity. However, the advantages, which were listed may lead to negative ramifications, which will be explained in the further paragraph. In contrast, a simple glare at poorer countries may reveal and stand as an example of the negative effect on the economy. The lack of people's engagement in the working process of those countries strongly bringing down the economy because today everything is inextricably linked to international trading that, in its turn, can bring, into the budgets of countries, money and consequently prosperity. Moreover, plenty of free time gives to people room of consideration, then it can cause a civil war because people might start either realise the level of poverty or be discontent how their local authorities to work. To conclude, it is no doubt true that less working hours introduced in the society may have a positive impact on the people such as shaping a creative set of mind in an individual or it can give more time to rest. However, in my opinion, it can cause serious consequences such as anarchy because governments lose control of them.
In the era of automated systems and robotics, it is evident that
many
manual jobs disappeared from the work market.
In this case
, the
idea
of reducing
working
hours
has prompted in the society. This essay will
explain
the pros and cons of bringing the
working
hours
down in the
details
and
give
evidence as to why this initiative does not have a
positive
effect on society.

To
begin
, bringing down the
working
hours
is a key to the
people
's freedom
because
they
are exempted
of the duties and responsibilities they have when they
sign
a contract.
Therefore
, if,
for instance
, the
working
days were
reduced
to two days a week, it would
give
to
people
a huge amount of time, which they could
use
for their personal affairs, learning, leisure or creativity.
However
, the advantages, which
were listed
may lead to
negative
ramifications, which will be
explained
in the
further
paragraph.

In contrast
, a simple glare at poorer countries may reveal and stand as an example of the
negative
effect on the economy. The lack of
people
's engagement in the
working
process of those countries
strongly
bringing down the economy
because
today
everything is
inextricably
linked to international trading that, in its turn, can bring, into the budgets of countries, money and
consequently
prosperity.
Moreover
,
plenty
of free time
gives
to
people
room of consideration, then it can cause a civil war
because
people
might
start
either
realise
the level of poverty or be discontent how their local authorities to work.

To conclude
, it is no doubt true that less
working
hours
introduced in the society may have a
positive
impact on the
people
such as shaping a creative set of mind in an individual or it can
give
more time to rest.
However
, in my opinion, it can cause serious consequences such as anarchy
because
governments
lose control of them.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Talk about something that was made with your own hands for your friend or relative. Please say- What was it? - How did you make it? - What was the response when he/she received it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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