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Describe a famous person in your country. Please say- Who is he/she? - What does he/she do? - Why is he/she so famous? - Why do you think people like him/her? v.1

Describe a famous person in your country. Please say- Who is he/she? - What does he/she do? - Why is he/she so famous? - Why do you think people like him/her? v. 1
Pollution is one of the most worrying environmental issue in recent days. Most of the people think that increase in the price of fuel for cars and vehicles is the best solution to solve the environmental problems. To some extent I agree to this, but there are many other factors by which we can reduce the problems. I will explain my perception in the following passage. Firstly, by reducing the price of fuels for cars and vehicles we can reduce the pollution to some extent. But there are many other factors too. Environmental problems are also caused due to the different industries and also because of using polythene. For example, companies release their fertilisers and fuels after the process of production into nearer canals, rivers and lakes which leads to water pollution. As modern technology being improved along with the increase in one's income, the rise in the price of fuels affects only some people but it reflects the life of a middle class person. At the same time, usage of polythene and plastic by humans also affects the environment. For instance, polythene covers used by individuals for carrying things and after that they have been thrown. While, these take much time to dissolve in soil, which causes global warming and pollution. Also, many birds and fishes have this as a food with a wrong perception that it is an eatable. Indirectly, which leads to the destruction of them because it may get struck in their body or it may be poisonous to many living species. After having considered all the points that I have discussed above, we can finally draw a conclusion that the increase in the price of fuels for cars and vehicles can not solve environment issues permanently. The government has to take some major decisions in order to reduce pollution.
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Pollution
is one of the most worrying environmental issue in recent days. Most of the
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people
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think
that increase in the
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price
of
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fuel
for cars and vehicles is the best solution to solve the environmental problems.

To
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some
extent I
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agree
to this,
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but
there are
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many
other factors by which we can
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reduce
the problems. I will
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explain
my perception in the following passage.

Firstly
, by reducing the
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price
of
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fuels
for cars and vehicles we can
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reduce
the
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pollution
to
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some
extent.
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But
there are
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many
other factors too. Environmental problems are
also
caused due to the
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different
industries and
also
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because
of using polythene.
For example
,
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companies
release their
Possible spelling mistake. 'fertilisers' is British English.
fertilisers
and
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fuels
after the process of production into nearer canals, rivers and lakes which leads to water
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pollution
. As modern technology being
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improved
along with the increase in one's income, the rise in the
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price
of
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fuels
affects
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only
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some
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people
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but
it reflects the life of a middle
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class
person.

At the same time, usage of polythene and plastic by humans
also
affects the environment.
For instance
, polythene covers
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used
by individuals for carrying things and after that they have
been thrown
. While, these take much time to dissolve in soil, which causes global warming and
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pollution
.
Also
,
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many
birds and fishes have this as
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a food
with a
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wrong
perception that it is an eatable.
Indirectly
, which leads to the destruction of them
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because
it may
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get
struck in their body or it may be poisonous to
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many
living species.

After having considered all the points that I have discussed above, we can
finally
draw a conclusion that the increase in the
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price
of
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fuels
for cars and vehicles can not solve environment issues
permanently
. The
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government
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has to
take
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some
major decisions in order to
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reduce
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pollution
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay Describe a famous person in your country. Please say- Who is he/she? - What does he/she do? - Why is he/she so famous? - Why do you think people like him/her? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
304 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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