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Talk about a specific time when you did something obsessively. For example, didyou “go to extremes” playing video games, worrying about an exam, or practicing asport or music? What did you do? What were the good and bad results? Explain v.1

Talk about a specific time when you did something obsessively. For example, didyou “go to extremes” playing video games, worrying about an exam, or practicing asport or music? What did you do? What were the good and bad results? Explain v. 1
In a recent study medical practitioners have mentioned that present lifestyle of people doesn't include physical workouts and the causes of this can be traced to the way modern society operates. But there are some potential ways to tackle this issue and improve the standard of living. On the one hand, many people in the society are struggling to find time to do their fitness activities. Due to their busy schedules they are not able to find leisure time to do daily exercise and due to the exhausted job they are not possible to concentrate on their routines in fitness programmes. For example, people working in IT sectors spend too much time in their office to complete their pending project works. Eventually, they return home exhausted and do not have enough time to do their fitness activities. On the other hand the problem exists at the society level itself, that is the lifestyle should be changed. Everyone is responsible for their health and they keep in mind that exercise is not a choice but it is an essential process in everyone's life to achieve better physical health. For example, during the break hours in the office they can climb the stairs or do a brisk walk rather than scrolling to the current memes. Hence, by implementing such steps can contribute a good source of workouts in one's busy life. To conclude, people use small initiatives to get proper exercise. But they should be aware of the consequences in not doing exercise and this lead to take exercise regularly in a serious manner.
In a recent study medical practitioners have mentioned that present lifestyle of
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people
doesn't include physical workouts and the causes of this can
be traced
to the way modern society operates.
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But
there are
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some
potential ways to tackle this issue and
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improve
the standard of living.

On the one hand,
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many
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people
in the society are struggling to find
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time
to do their fitness activities. Due to their busy schedules they are not able to find leisure
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time
to do daily
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exercise
and due to the exhausted job they are not possible to concentrate on their routines in fitness
Possible spelling mistake. 'programmes' is British English.
programmes
.
For example
,
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people
working in IT sectors spend too much
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time
in their office to complete their pending project works.
Eventually
, they return home exhausted and do not have
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enough
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time
to do their fitness activities.

On the other hand
the problem exists at the society level itself,
that is
the lifestyle should be
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changed
. Everyone is responsible for their
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
health and
they
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keep
in mind that
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exercise
is not a choice
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but
it is an essential process in everyone's life to achieve better physical health.
For example
, during the break hours in the office they can climb the stairs or do a brisk walk
rather
than scrolling to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
memes.
Hence
, by implementing such steps can contribute a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
source of workouts in one's busy life.

To conclude
,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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small
initiatives to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
proper
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exercise
.
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But
they should be aware of the consequences in not doing
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exercise
and this lead to take
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exercise
regularly
Consider replacing "in a serious manner" with the adverb for "serious"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a serious manner
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Talk about a specific time when you did something obsessively. For example, didyou “go to extremes” playing video games, worrying about an exam, or practicing asport or music? What did you do? What were the good and bad results? Explain v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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