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Talk about a place you like to go and why you like to go there. Give details to support your response. v.1

Talk about a place you like to go and why you like to go there. Give details to support your response. v. 1
People of all walks of life, both young and old, enjoy travelling. Tourist sector has been growing remarkably in recent times. This essay will discuss the positive aspects of tourism on people and nations as a whole. Travelling exposes you to different cultures and religions around the world. People get involved in other customs and experience them in person. There are year old traditions which are a great source of knowledge. It also refreshes your mind and soul and brings in a sense of peace and harmony. You get away from your daily hectic schedule and spend some time enjoying the beautiful sites universe has to offer. According to a recent study conducted at Harvard University, individuals who are frequent travellers have more knowledge about the world’s history. Hence, visiting other places help individuals learn other people and refreshing their system. Economic benefits and job opportunities also increase with increased tourism. Tourists bring in a lot of cash, which adds to the nation’s economy. It also brings in more employment chances such as tour guides and snack stalls around major attractions. For example, Dubai’s leisure department contributes 60 percent to the city’s economy. Therefore, travellers bring in more money in the country and create work and business possibilities. In conclusion, travelling is on the rise nowadays. This essay discussed the advantages of tourism on individuals being exposed to other cultures and traditions and peacefulness. It also addressed the benefits of society such as increased finances in reserves and more work prospects.
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of all walks of life, both young and
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old
, enjoy travelling. Tourist sector has been growing
remarkably
in recent times. This essay will discuss the
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positive
aspects of tourism on
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people
and nations as a whole.

Travelling exposes you to
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different
cultures and religions around the world.
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People
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get
involved in
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other
customs and experience them in person. There are year
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old
traditions which are a great source of knowledge. It
also
refreshes your mind and soul and
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brings
in a sense of peace and harmony. You
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get
away from your daily hectic schedule and spend
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some
time enjoying the
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beautiful
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sites
universe
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has to
offer. According to a recent study conducted at Harvard University, individuals who are frequent
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travellers
have more knowledge about the world’s history.
Hence
, visiting
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other
places
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help
individuals learn
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other
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people
and refreshing their system.

Economic benefits and job opportunities
also
increase with increased tourism. Tourists
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bring
in
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a lot of
cash, which
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adds
to the nation’s economy. It
also
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brings
in more employment chances such as tour guides and snack stalls around major attractions.
For example
, Dubai’s leisure department contributes 60 percent to the city’s economy.
Therefore
,
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travellers
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bring
in more money in the country and create work and business possibilities.

In conclusion
, travelling is on the rise nowadays. This essay discussed the advantages of tourism on individuals
being exposed
to
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other
cultures and traditions and peacefulness. It
also
addressed the benefits of society such as increased finances in reserves and more work prospects.
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IELTS essay Talk about a place you like to go and why you like to go there. Give details to support your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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