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考满分 toeflTPO-02 Independent Writingnext29: 37 HIDE TIMEDirections: You have 30 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the v.2

考满分 toeflTPO-02 Independent Writingnext29: 37 HIDE TIMEDirections: You have 30 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the v. 2
There are different definitions to the word ' ' Relationship' ' in our life. there is marital relationship, family relationship, and friendship. But all the definitions have to have the truth element in it or it won' t be complete. Although, a lot of people see that sometimes small lie my be helpful in some situations, but I have different opinion. I believe that always saying the truth is the best solution due to the reasons I will discuss right now. First, saying the truth helps you from getting problems. Yon know when sometimes at work you have something broken while you were working on it, and you being afraid and try to hide or get rid off it and not take responsibility for. As a result when your lead found that it getting worse, because you did not tell him the truth so he won' t trust you any more, in addition the mistake you did it was fixable, if you told him from the beginning that' s might help you and fix it immediately without any problem. In another way, you can always be in the safe side when you are telling the truth no matter what is the results. Second, in the relationships between a couple whatever engaged or married, saying the truth is the right way to get a happy and perfect life. For instance, me and my husband always try to be true to each other in everything. Even though sometimes it' s so difficult to say it but we have to say it, in order to get the life we want and we planned to since we where a couple. personally, I see that if I tell him the truth from the beginning I save a lot of time of arguing If he discovers the truth later, I will withstand the results of my faults from the first second rather than make him upset and not talking with me for a while or even leave me depending on the size of the lie. Admittedly, it may be true that sometimes saying the ' ' white lies' ' are fine to tell, because it save you from a lot misunderstanding or big problems. Sometimes it is useful to keep someone feelings from getting hurt due to saying the truth, like when you try to hide your illness so they will not feel worry about you or when someone hide their feeling towards love ones because the other one is in love with other person. However, I still recommend saying the truth all the times in order to save yourself from having bad situation if you don' t. In conclusion, for all the reason stated above, I encourage people to try saying the truth in their daily life, in work, with friends and family. If they do so they will see the difference themselves and they will be so glad they did!
There are
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different
definitions to the word ' '
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Relationship&
#039; ' in our
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life
.
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there
is marital
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relationship
, family
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relationship
, and friendship.
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But
all the definitions
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have to
have the
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truth
element in it or it
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won&
#039; t be complete. Although,
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a lot of
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people
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see
that
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sometimes
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small
lie
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my be
helpful in
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some
situations,
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but
I have
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different
opinion. I believe that always
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saying
the
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truth
is the best solution due to the reasons I will discuss right
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now
.

First
,
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saying
the
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truth
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helps
you from getting problems. Yon know when
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sometimes
at work you have something broken while you were working on it, and you being afraid and try to
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hide
or
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get
rid
Did you mean "of" ('get rid of' = 'discard' or 'get free of')?
off
it and not take responsibility for.
As a result
when your lead found that
Did you mean "it's getting", "it is getting", or "it was getting"?
it getting
worse,
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because
you did not
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tell
him the
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truth
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so
he
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won&
#039; t trust you
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
,
in addition
the mistake you did it was fixable, if you
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told
him from the beginning
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that&
#039; s might
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help
you and
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fix
it immediately without any problem. In another way, you can always be in the safe side when you are telling the
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truth
no matter what is the results.

Second, in the
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relationships
between a couple whatever engaged or married,
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saying
the
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truth
is the right way to
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get
a happy and perfect
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life
.
For instance
, me and my husband always try to be true to each other in everything.
Even though
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sometimes
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it&
#039; s
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so
difficult to say it
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but
we
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have to
say it, in order to
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get
the
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life
we
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want and
we planned to since we
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where
a couple.
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personally
, I
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see
that if I
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tell
him the
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truth
from the beginning I save
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a lot of
time of arguing If he discovers the
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truth
later, I will withstand the results of my faults from the
first
second
rather
than
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make
him upset and not talking with me for a while or even
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leave
me depending on the size of the lie.

Admittedly
, it may be true that
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sometimes
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saying
the ' ' white
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lies&
#039; ' are fine to
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tell
,
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because
it
Did you mean "saves"?
save
you from
If you mean a great quantity, use "a lot of misunderstanding"?
a lot misunderstanding
or
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big
problems.
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Sometimes
it is useful to
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keep
someone feelings from getting hurt due to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
saying
the
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truth
, like when you try to
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hide
your illness
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so
they will not feel worry about you or when someone
The pronoun 'someone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "hides", "hid".
hide
their feeling towards
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love
ones
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because
the other one is in
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love
with other person.
However
, I
still
recommend
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saying
the
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truth
all the times in order to save yourself from having
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bad
situation if you
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don&
#039; t.

In conclusion
, for all the reason stated above, I encourage
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people
to try
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saying
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
truth
in their daily
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life
, in work, with friends and family. If they do
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so
they will
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see
the difference
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
themselves and
they will be
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so
glad they did!
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Mistakes

IELTS essay 考满分 toeflTPO-02 Independent Writingnext29: 37 HIDE TIMEDirections: You have 30 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
486 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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