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talk about a place you enjoy visiting when you where a child. describe place explain why you enjoyed it v.1

talk about a place you enjoy visiting when you where a child. describe place explain why you enjoyed it v. 1
Nowadays, disciplining children through physical penalty, such as smacking is trendy. It is claimed that smacking is an effective way to control children's behaviour by certain demographics of society. This article will discuss that disciplining children by physical punishment such as smacking is a completely unacceptable method, on account of some potential causes of the punishment. On the other hand, some people insist on using physical violence to change their children's acts. Many parents might think that pain helps children to maintain their behaviour in a good way. Moreover, as per their thoughts, the fear makes children's overwhelming desires reduce. For example, when a child spoiled behaves, their parents may slowly smack their bottom to punish them. Although it is not the best way, some parents believe that it is a good method and keep using physical penalty. Physical punishment is completely hazardous and preposterous. Smacking whose severity is high would be able to give some physical damages to children. Moreover, physical punishment such as smacking may cause some mental issues will be able to affect children's future. The children have grown up with smacking may behave to their children in the same way. Overall, smacking might be harmful both physically and mentally to children. In conclusion, the idea that physical punishment such as smacking to discipline children is absolutely inappropriate has been discussed in this essay by being supported by some examples. In my opinion, smacking absolutely is not a good solution to control children's tactless behaviour due to some potential risks.
Nowadays, disciplining
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children
through
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physical
penalty, such as smacking is trendy. It
is claimed
that smacking is an effective way to control
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children's
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behaviour
by certain demographics of society. This article will discuss that disciplining
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children
by
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physical
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punishment
such as smacking is a completely unacceptable method, on account of
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some
potential causes of the punishment.

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,
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some
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people
insist on using
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physical
violence to
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change
their
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children's
acts.
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parents might
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think
that pain
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helps
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children
to maintain their
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behaviour
in a
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good
way.
Moreover
, as per their thoughts, the fear
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makes
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children's
overwhelming desires
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reduce
.
For example
, when a child spoiled behaves, their parents may
slowly
smack their bottom to punish them. Although it is not the best way,
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some
parents believe that it is a
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good
method and
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keep
using
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physical
penalty.

Physical
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punishment
is completely hazardous and preposterous. Smacking whose severity is high would be able to give
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some
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physical
damages to
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children
.
Moreover
,
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physical
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punishment
such as smacking may cause
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some
mental issues will be able to affect
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children's
future. The
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children
have grown up with smacking may behave to their
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children
in the same way
.
Overall
, smacking might be harmful both
physically
and mentally to children.

In conclusion
, the
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idea
that
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physical
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punishment
such as smacking to discipline
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children
is
absolutely
inappropriate has
been discussed
in this essay by
being supported
by
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some
examples. In my opinion, smacking
absolutely
is not a
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good
solution to control
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children's
tactless
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behaviour
due to
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some
potential
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.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay talk about a place you enjoy visiting when you where a child. describe place explain why you enjoyed it v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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