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talk about a book you have read that was important to you for some reasons. Explain why the book was important to you. v.1

talk about a book you have read that was important to you for some reasons. Explain why the book was important to you. v. 1
Over the past few decades, there has been an increasingly popular trend amongst the youngsters of taking a gap year before starting their tertiary education. While this practice may have a few negative effects, there are a plethora of benefits that cannot be overlooked. Taking a sabbatical might present some challenges. This is because they would graduate later than their peers at school, which may make them feel left behind, as their counterparts would settle immediately after completing their education. In addition, they would find it difficult, to resume their studies after a year’s gap, as a result, they might lose focus and commitment requisite for higher studies, which could negatively affect their academic performance. Moreover, due to this, they might lose on job opportunities in the future, as they may not be able to explain the gap, if not utilized wisely, and their under-performance at graduation level. Hence, the gap year may bring a few obstacles to students' career. However, this practice presents an overwhelming amount of benefits. Most importantly, gaining practical experiences, by working and travelling, in life make them mature, responsible, and independent as they would have faced certain challenges while dealing with different people and situations. Furthermore, they are exposed to a new environment which helps them to learn about the diverse culture and societies they live in, which in turn, make them sensitive towards people who belong to different religions. Not only do they understand other people's lives better, but they also get an opportunity to learn different languages as they travel and work in diverse communities. Thus, spending a year travelling or working is an obvious choice as it has a multitude of advantages. In conclusion, it is evident that while there may be a few obstacles when people take a year’s break after high school, they also stand to benefit immensely due to the wide, long-ranging benefits offered by this practice. If people truly wish to enrich their lives, they should not hesitate to take a gap year.
Over the past few decades, there has been an
increasingly
popular trend amongst the youngsters of taking a
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gap
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year
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before
starting their tertiary education. While this practice may have a few
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negative
effects, there are a plethora of
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benefits
that cannot
be overlooked
.

Taking a sabbatical might present
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some
challenges. This is
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because
they would graduate later than their peers at school, which may
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make
them feel
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left
behind, as their counterparts would settle immediately after completing their education.
In addition
, they would find it difficult, to resume their studies after a
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year’s
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gap
,
as a result
, they might lose focus and commitment requisite for higher studies, which could
negatively
affect their academic performance.
Moreover
, due to this, they might lose on job opportunities in the future, as they may not be able to
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explain
the
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gap
, if not utilized
wisely
, and their under-performance at graduation level.
Hence
, the
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gap
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year
may bring a few obstacles to students' career.

However
, this practice presents an overwhelming amount of
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benefits
. Most
importantly
, gaining practical experiences, by working and travelling, in life
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make
them mature, responsible, and independent as they would have faced certain challenges while dealing with
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different
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people
and situations.
Furthermore
, they
are exposed
to a new environment which
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helps
them to learn about the diverse culture and societies they
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live
in, which in turn,
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make
them sensitive towards
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people
who belong to
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different
religions. Not
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only
do they understand other
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people
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lives
better,
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but
they
also
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get
an opportunity to learn
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different
languages as they travel and work in diverse communities.
Thus
, spending a
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year
travelling or working is an obvious choice as it has a multitude of advantages.

In conclusion
, it is evident that while there may be a few obstacles when
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people
take a
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year’s
break after high school, they
also
stand to
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benefit
immensely
due to the wide, long-ranging
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benefits
offered by this practice. If
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people
truly
wish to enrich their
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lives
, they should not hesitate to take a
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gap
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year
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay talk about a book you have read that was important to you for some reasons. Explain why the book was important to you. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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