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Take a look at the graphic and complete the task. The graph shows the results of a survey of British public figures that people can recognise from their photographs. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison v.1

Take a look at the graphic and complete the task. The graph shows the results of a survey of British public figures that people can recognise from their photographs.
Climate change is among the serious threat to people in this century and the sea levels are rising dramatically. The primary problem of this phenomenon is flooding many peoples residences and the most viable solution is to build flood protection and public awareness about its dangers in near future. The principal problem associated with global warming and rising sea levels is flooding this resulted in many losing people homes and properties. Millions of people live in coastal areas if the level of oceans increase even small amount thus leads to floodings and many people lose their shelter which is very important for everyone. For example, in 2011 Tsunami hit major parts of Japan destroyed many people properties and houses which, in turn millions of people displacement to other places. To tackle this problem government should launch a publicity campaign in the media and in the schools to educate people about the dangers of global warming and increasing sea levels. Many people do not know how to contribute to save mother earth from global warming and rising ocean levels and there are people who burn fossil fuel irresponsibly. A public awareness campaign could shed some light on this difficult situation and allow people to do their part responsibly. For example, a similar initiative in India resulted in many people started planting trees in their backyard and using public transport even government of India build many dams in the coastal regions to reduce the damage from floods. In conclusion, the effects of Global warming are increasing the sea levels, thus resulted in flooding the homes and properties of millions. However, to address this issue publicly awareness to act responsibly and building dams for the protection from floods.
Climate
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change
is among the serious threat to
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people
in this century and the
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sea
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levels
are rising
dramatically
. The primary problem of this phenomenon is
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flooding
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many
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peoples
residences and the most viable solution is to build flood protection and public awareness about its
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dangers
in near future.

The principal problem associated with
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global
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warming
and rising
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sea
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levels
is
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flooding
this resulted in
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many
losing
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people
homes and properties. Millions of
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people
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live
in coastal areas if the
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level
of oceans increase even
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small
amount
thus
leads to
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floodings
and
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many
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people
lose their shelter which is
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very
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important
for everyone.
For example
, in 2011 Tsunami hit major parts of Japan
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destroyed
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many
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people
properties and
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houses
which, in turn millions of
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people
displacement to other places.

To tackle this problem
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government
should launch a publicity campaign in the media and in the schools to educate
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people
about the
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dangers
of
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global
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warming
and increasing
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sea
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levels
.
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Many
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people
do not know how to contribute to save mother earth from
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global
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warming
and rising ocean
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levels
and there are
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people
who burn fossil fuel
irresponsibly
. A public awareness campaign could shed
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some
light on this difficult situation and
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allow
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people
to do their part
responsibly
.
For example
, a similar initiative in India resulted in
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many
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people
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started
planting trees in their backyard and using public transport even
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government
of India build
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many
dams in the coastal regions to
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reduce
the damage from floods.

In conclusion
, the effects of
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Global
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warming
are increasing the
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sea
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levels
,
thus
resulted in
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flooding
the homes and properties of millions.
However
, to address this issue
publicly
awareness to act
responsibly
and building dams for the protection from floods.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Take a look at the graphic and complete the task. The graph shows the results of a survey of British public figures that people can recognise from their photographs.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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