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Symbiotic Relationships Symbiosis refers to an intimate relationship between two organisms. This term does not indicate whether the relationship is beneficial or harmful to teh organisms involved. Mutual symbiosis, or mutualism, occurs when both species g v.2

Symbiotic Relationships Symbiosis refers to an intimate relationship between two organisms. This term does not indicate whether the relationship is beneficial or harmful to teh organisms involved. Mutual symbiosis, or mutualism, occurs when both species g v. 2
Some people believe that to relish more success and secured life, it is always a better option to choose science and technical streams. On the other side many people feel it is passionate to get indulge in an art career. I strongly feel that if we are doing anything with full focus and passion, we can achieve our goal which will not only provide us financial security but also lots of happiness and satisfaction. Firstly, in the today’s world, people are highly educated, they never judge anyone on the basis of one factor either intelligence or great sense of humour. People love to have the complete package; they give equal importance to the health and to the entertainment as well. If a health expert is not very smart to prescribe well or he is not experienced, people will never approach, only because he or she is having a degree. They could also face the deficiency of money; similarly, if a person is not having great skills to impress others with their voice or with their art, nobody is going to approach them for their entertainment. People will pay only to those persons who will serve them efficiently. Secondly, every field needs more time, effort and money. It is not always easy to become a technical expert or a musician. The person, who will work more on their skills and actions, will ultimately become more efficient. For example, if a doctor is not practicing after getting his degree, he will get obsolete very soon as his skills are not well polished. In this modern world, many musicians are more in demand than doctor or technical experts, because of their soothe voice and they are getting paid well. Moreover, people feel if doctors are crucial for their physical wellness, they also need musicians to relax their mind and get entertained, which is highly important for this rush lifestyle. In conclusion, people are in the need of everything not only technology or entertainment. They will pay happily to those persons who will serve well either for their physical needs or mental needs. Therefore, we cannot say people who are educated will get more pay. They need to be great in their own field to get valuable payment.
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believe that to relish more success and secured life, it is always a better option to choose science and technical streams. On the other side
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many
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people
feel it is passionate to
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indulge in an art career. I
strongly
feel that if we are doing anything with full focus and passion, we can achieve our goal which will not
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only
provide us financial security
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but
also
lots of happiness and satisfaction.

Firstly
, in the
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today
’s world,
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people
are
highly
educated, they never judge anyone on the basis of one factor either intelligence or great sense of
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People
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love
to have the complete package; they give equal importance to the health and to the entertainment as
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well
. If a health expert is not
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very
smart to prescribe
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well or
he is not experienced,
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people
will never approach,
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only
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because
he or she is having a degree. They could
also
face the deficiency of money;
similarly
, if a
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person
is not having great
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skills
to impress others with their voice or with their art, nobody is going to approach them for their entertainment.
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will pay
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only
to those
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persons
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who
will serve them
efficiently
.

Secondly
, every field
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needs
more time, effort and money. It is not always easy to become a technical expert or a musician. The
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person
,
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who
will work more on their
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skills
and actions, will
ultimately
become more efficient.
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, if a doctor is not practicing after getting his degree, he will
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get
obsolete
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very
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soon
as his
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skills
are not
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well
polished. In this modern world,
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many
musicians are more in demand than doctor or technical experts,
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because
of their soothe
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voice and
they are getting paid
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well
.
Moreover
,
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people
feel if doctors are crucial for their physical wellness, they
also
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need
musicians to relax their mind and
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get
entertained, which is
highly
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important
for this rush lifestyle.

In conclusion
,
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people
are in the
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need
of everything not
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only
technology or entertainment. They will pay
happily
to those
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persons
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who
will serve
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well
either for their physical
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needs
or mental
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needs
.
Therefore
, we cannot say
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people
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who
are educated
will
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get
more pay. They
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need
to be great in their
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own
field to
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get
valuable payment.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Symbiotic Relationships Symbiosis refers to an intimate relationship between two organisms. This term does not indicate whether the relationship is beneficial or harmful to teh organisms involved. Mutual symbiosis, or mutualism, occurs when both species g v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
374 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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