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Question1: (related to complaint )You have bought a new mobile phone and in a few days of purchase, it has stopped working. You have spoken to the company representative a week ago but it has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your v.1

Question1: (related to complaint )You have bought a new mobile phone and in a few days of purchase, it has stopped working. You have spoken to the company representative a week ago but it has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your v. 1
It is believed by some people that household waste is not recycled completely and properly. Hence, they feel that this situation could be improved if the government make it a legal necessity. Thought I believe that improvements are required to ameliorate the current scenario, I disagree that a legal regulation should be made to improve the situation. Some better methods such as educating the public and rewarding them would be better options. As the majority of the public are unaware about the importance of recycling, they do not bother to contribute. Therefore, government should educate the people by organizing some interactive lectures and demonstrate practical knowledge about recycling and reusing household materials. For instance, many countries such as Finland and Sweden are extremely successful in recycling most of their daily waste because their citizens are aware about the advantages of recycling. Furthermore, the government could give recognition to the people who actively take part in making the recycling procedure a success. This will not only act as a deterrent for people to waste less, but will also motivate others to volunteer in the transformation of better waste disposal and recycle. It is evident that people do better at tasks for which they are frequently rewarded and appreciated. For example, people in Australia are rewarded on World Environmental Day who contribute towards the environment. In conclusion, while some people believe that recycling waste should be made a compulsion for better household waste recycling, I believe there are other better methods such as those listed above for better handling of the situation.
It
is believed
by
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some
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people
that household
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
is not recycled completely and
properly
.
Hence
, they feel that this situation could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
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make
it a legal necessity.
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Thought
I believe that improvements
are required
to ameliorate the
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current
scenario, I disagree that a legal regulation should
be made
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the situation.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
methods such as educating the public and rewarding them would be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
options.

As the majority of the public are unaware about the importance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
, they do not bother to contribute.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should educate the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
by organizing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
interactive lectures and demonstrate practical knowledge about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
and reusing household materials.
For instance
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
countries such as Finland and Sweden are
extremely
successful in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
most of their daily
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
their citizens are aware about the advantages of recycling.

Furthermore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
could give recognition to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
actively
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in making the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
procedure a success. This will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
act as a deterrent for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
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waste
less,
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but
will
also
motivate others to volunteer in the transformation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
disposal and recycle. It is evident that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
do
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
at tasks for which they are
frequently
rewarded and appreciated.
For example
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in Australia
are rewarded
on World Environmental Day who contribute towards the environment.

In conclusion
, while
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
should
be made
a compulsion for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
household
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
, I believe there are other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
methods such as those listed above for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
handling of the situation.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Question1: (related to complaint )You have bought a new mobile phone and in a few days of purchase, it has stopped working. You have spoken to the company representative a week ago but it has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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