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Write about the following topic: Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Successful sports professionals can earn a lot of more money than people in other important professions. Some people think that this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. v. 2

Elite sport professionals are paid huge dollars for their service unlike top prestige professions like doctors, researchers who earns little compare to them for this reason some people think it is unfair and an insult to more important profession that actually contributes to the society. nevertheless, athletes are paid not based on how important they are to the society, but their pay is determined by the media and television exposure for examples the best short-distance runner still earn lower compare to the average NBA start, the salaries of these sportsmen and women are mostly determined by the media popularity of their individual sporting domain, these media popularity are driven by the fan in the society where these sports takes place, but in the case of other noble professions where the contribution to the growth of the society is one of the core aims of their profession, their salary are mostly determined by their educational ranks, experience and the company they work for as a whole. for instance the president is tasked with the responsibility of the whole country, this is one of the most difficult and prestige job one can ever get, but some sports men like Ronaldo, Messi, curry, LeBron weekly wages are 2 to three time more than what the president earn, but that is not to say their job is better than that of the president but it is drive by the fans desire to see their star play play the sport the love week in week out. To round up, sport men face an uncertain future on injure can be the last time they take to their respective arena, and this is one of the reasons they are paid every penny they think they deserve, this is not to say other professions don't deserve this, it just boils down to the amount of money the sports industry makes.

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sport
 professionals are paid
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professions
 like doctors, researchers who Did you mean "earn"? Alternatively, check whether the singular of 'researchers' should be used.earn
earns
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little
 compare to them for this reason
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 it is unfair and an insult to more This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
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profession
 that actually contributes to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanyhumanitycommunitynationculturecivilization
society
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterNevertheless
nevertheless
, athletes are paid
 not based on how This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 they are to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanyhumanitycommunitynationculturecivilization
society
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 their pay is determined
 by the media and television exposure for examples the best short-distance runner still
 earn lower compare to the average NBA This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
, the salaries of these sportsmen and women are mostly
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 by the fan in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanyhumanitycommunitynationculturecivilization
society
 where these You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
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takes
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but
 in the case of other noble You use this word too often, consider replacing it withartbusinesscareerundertakingspecialtyfield
professions
 where the contribution to the growth of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanyhumanitycommunitynationculturecivilization
society
 is one of the core aims of their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withartbusinesscareerundertakingspecialtyfield
profession
, their salary are mostly
 determined by their educational ranks, experience and the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 they work for as a whole. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterFor
for
 instance the president is tasked
 with the responsibility of the whole country, this is one of the most difficult and prestige job one can ever This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
 like Ronaldo, Messi, curry, LeBron weekly wages are 2 to three time more than what the president earn, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
that is
 not to say their job is better than that of the president This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 it is drive by the fans desire to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 their star Possible typo: you repeated a wordplay
play play
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sport
 the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
love
 week in week out. To round up, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sport
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
 face an uncertain future on injure can be the last time they take to their respective arena, and this is one of the reasons they are paid
 every penny they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 they deserve, this is not to say other You use this word too often, consider replacing it withartbusinesscareerundertakingspecialtyfield
professions
 don't deserve this, it This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 boils down to the amount of money the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
 industry This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createsconstructsmanufacturesproduces
makes
. 