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success is solely achieved by hard work, luck does not play any role. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

success is solely achieved by hard work, luck does not play any role. v. 1
Success is achieving your desired goal, it gives you immense pleasure and satisfaction. Although the main drive behind the success is hard work, but luck also plays an important role. This essay will argue how significant is hard work or luck in getting the success. While dreaming is important to start, but putting your hard work in that dream is essential. Just dreaming about your grand success is not going to work until someone puts the efforts. If a student is aiming to top the exam, he cannot just rely on luck, he has to work hard to meet his target. Dream is not which comes in your sleep, dreams is what, which cannot let you sleep. In order to become a successful person you need to burn midnight oil. I believe that, people having ting of favour by luck, become successful. Because there are many people who are working very hard but only one out of them will reach the top. I believe this is his fortune. As many people prepare for civil services, all top ten rankers are bright students and it is difficult to differentiate among them, still only one top the exam. I believe this slight difference is created by luck, as topper student should have got more favourable questions that day. So it's my believe that Luck plays its role. Since hard work is the first step to the success, so no one can achieve his goal without efforts, but after putting his efforts it is time for your luck to play. Even it does not mean that our success completely depends on luck, firstly everyone has to burn himself to succeed in life.
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is achieving your desired goal, it gives you immense pleasure and satisfaction. Although the main drive behind the
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success
is
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hard
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work
,
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but
luck
also
plays an
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important
role. This essay will argue how significant is
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hard
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work
or luck in getting the success.

While dreaming is
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important
to
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start
,
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but
putting your
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hard
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work
in that dream is essential.
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Just
dreaming about your grand
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success
is not going to
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work
until someone puts the efforts. If a student is aiming to
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top
the exam, he cannot
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just
rely on luck, he
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has to
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work
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hard
to
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meet
his target. Dream is not which
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comes
in your sleep, dreams is what, which cannot
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let
you sleep. In order to become a successful person you need to burn midnight oil.

I
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that,
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people
having ting of
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favour
by luck, become successful.
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there are
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many
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people
who are working
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very
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but
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only
one out of them will reach the
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top
. I
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believe
this is his fortune. As
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many
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people
prepare for civil services, all
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top
ten
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rankers
are bright students and it is difficult to differentiate among them,
still
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only
one
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top
the exam. I
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this slight difference
is created
by luck, as topper student should have
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got
more
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favourable
questions that day.
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it's my
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believe
that Luck plays its role.

Since
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hard
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work
is the
first
step to the
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success
,
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so
no one can achieve his goal without efforts,
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but
after putting his efforts it is time for your luck to play. Even it does not mean that our
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success
completely depends on luck,
firstly
everyone
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has to
burn himself to succeed in life.
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IELTS essay success is solely achieved by hard work, luck does not play any role. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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