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Success in business can be assured if you have great marketing and promotion. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Success in business can be assured if you have great marketing and promotion. v. 1
The temperature of planet earth has changed rapidly over the past hundred years or so and some argue that we should not spend our money and energy to fight it but find means to adapt to this change. This essay disagrees with this view due to several reasons as we shall see. The first and foremost reason why we should stop or try to reduce the pace of global warming is that it is directly affecting our lives and it may prove to be an existential threat to the entire human race. For instance, the melting of polar ice caps will increase the sea levels around the world and many coastal cities will be submerged. Moreover, the change in weather patterns, and the gradual rise in degrees is having an adverse impact on the food production as well. Sitting idle and finding ways to adapt to it will result in its pace is going unchecked and it will accelerate and magnify the problems mentioned earlier. Another reason why maximum efforts on a global scale is needed to fight this danger is its effect on the health and wellness of living beings on earth. The steps that are required to stop or slow down global warming have the results of reducing pollution, and improving air quality which is a major concern for the residents of a number of big cities. For example, Lahore and New Dehli. In conclusion It is important to allocate maximum resources to fight global warming on every level for the future of next generations depend on it and finding alternative solutions to co- exist with it will never prove to be a long term solution.
The temperature of planet earth has
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changed
rapidly
over the past hundred years or
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so
and
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some
argue that we should not spend our money and energy to fight it
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but
find means to adapt to this
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change
. This essay disagrees with this view due to several reasons as we shall
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see
.

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first
and foremost reason why we should
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stop
or try to
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reduce
the pace of
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global
warming is that it is
directly
affecting our
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lives
and it may prove to be an existential threat to the entire human race.
For instance
, the melting of polar ice caps will increase the sea levels around the world and
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many
coastal cities will
be submerged
.
Moreover
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in weather patterns, and the gradual rise in degrees is having an adverse impact on the food production
as well
. Sitting idle and finding ways to adapt to it will result in its pace is going unchecked and it will accelerate and magnify the problems mentioned earlier.

Another reason why maximum efforts on a
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global
scale
is needed
to fight this
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danger
is its effect on the health and wellness of living beings on earth. The steps that
are required
to
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stop
or slow down
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global
warming have the results of reducing pollution, and improving air quality which is a major concern for the residents of a number of
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big
cities.
For example
, Lahore and New
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Dehli
.

In conclusion
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important
to allocate maximum resources to fight
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warming on every level for the future of
next
generations depend on it and finding alternative solutions to co- exist with it will never prove to be a long term solution.
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IELTS essay Success in business can be assured if you have great marketing and promotion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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