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Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.5

Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. v. 5
There is no doubt that, since several centuries, the environment is in danger. Nowadays, some people think that the decrease in the number of some types of animals and plants is the main problem in that danger. While others believe that there are other things which can be more important environmental problems. In this essay I am going to discuss both sides and draw my personal conclusion. Speaking of problems, human beings are one of the biggest reasons of the problems. The main reason given to support this claim is the climate change which has been recently being danger on the nature. To illustrate, the behaviours of some people such as cutting an entire forest and the traffic pollution could have a huge effect on the environment. In other words, people should really know what they are doing because these behaviours are one of the important problems on the nature issue. Hence the belief that human beings are playing a big role in this cause. However, it should not be forgotten that the losing of rare species of animals and plants is very dangerous. For example, the big fishes eat the smaller fishes, if there are no more small fishes the big one will die. In other words, the life circle of plants and animals is linked with each other. So, one error in this circle will be problem on the nature and on the human beings. In conclusion, after a care full analysis of both views, I believe that there are more important environmental problems, such as the human being’s behaviours.
There is no doubt that, since several centuries, the environment is in
danger
. Nowadays,
some
people
think
that the decrease in the number of
some
types of animals and plants is the main
problem
in that
danger
.
While
others believe that there are
other
things which can be more
important
environmental
problems
. In this essay I am going to discuss both sides and draw my personal conclusion.

Speaking of
problems
,
human
beings are one of the biggest reasons of the
problems
. The main reason
given
to support this claim is the climate
change
which has been recently being
danger
on the nature. To illustrate, the
behaviours
of
some
people
such as cutting an entire forest and the traffic pollution could have a huge effect on the environment. In
other
words,
people
should
really
know what they are doing
because
these
behaviours
are one of the
important
problems
on the nature issue.
Hence
the belief that
human
beings are playing a
big
role in this cause.

However
, it should not
be forgotten
that the losing of rare species of animals and plants is
very
dangerous
.
For example
, the
big
fishes eat the smaller fishes, if there are no more
small
fishes the
big
one will
die
. In
other
words, the life circle of plants and animals
is linked
with each
other
.
So
, one error in this circle will be
problem
on the nature and on the
human
beings.

In conclusion
, after a care full analysis of both views, I believe that there are more
important
environmental
problems
, such as the
human
being’s
behaviours
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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