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Studying abroad can be highly motivational for students and also inspire their dreams However whilst studying abroad can have a number of positive effects on students there are also many difficulties that they may meet along the way With this in mind it i v.2

Studying abroad can be highly motivational for students and also inspire their dreams However whilst studying abroad can have a number of positive effects on students there are also many difficulties that they may meet along the way With this in mind it i v. 2
The issue of whether studying at home or abroad is still widely debated, despite pursuing an education in a foreign country can be challenging for international students, I personally do not feel that studying at home, especially for students who want a higher standard of education, is a sensible idea, and I will explain why. Firstly, we must consider the potential negatives of studying at home. For example, students who start university at their home country become much less independent, as their parents are behind them and support them not only money-wise but also emotionally. Furthermore, they may not have opportunities to develop crucial life skills such as managing their own finances and facing challenges which can negatively affect their career opportunities as well as personal life. In these cases, studying at home actually leads to having neither life skills nor career ones. A further reason to be wary of this idea is the ignorance of positive implications of living abroad and graduating from an overseas university. It is sometimes said that studying at home colleges can save students' money. In reality, however, that money is consumed in other expenses, and then it will not be saved for the future. While earning a master' s degree from an international university may improve employment prospects which in turn can result in highly paid jobs with high-quality working conditions. What is more, it can provide students studying abroad with experiencing new life and culture. According to research, students who spend more time in a foreign country to continue their education can not only overcome the language barriers but also hone their language skills as well as foster relationships with people from different backgrounds and make lifelong friends. This is not to say that studying at home is entirely bad, of course. There are benefits in terms of convenience and feeling no homesickness. However, its disadvantages far outweigh the advantages.
The issue of whether
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studying
at home or abroad is
still
widely
debated, despite pursuing an education in a foreign country can be challenging for international
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students
, I
personally
do not feel that
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studying
at home,
especially
for
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students
who want a higher standard of education, is a sensible
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idea
, and I will
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explain
why.

Firstly
, we
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must
consider the potential negatives of
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studying
at home.
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,
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students
who
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start
university at their home country become much less independent, as their parents are behind them and support them not
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only
money-wise
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but
also
emotionally
.
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, they may not have opportunities to develop crucial
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life
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skills
such as managing their
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own
finances and facing challenges which can
negatively
affect their career opportunities
as well
as personal
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life
. In these cases,
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studying
at home actually leads to having neither
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life
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skills
nor career ones.

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further
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idea
is the ignorance of
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positive
implications of living abroad and graduating from an overseas university. It is
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sometimes
said that
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studying
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improve
employment prospects which in turn can result in
highly
paid jobs with high-quality working conditions.
What is more
, it can provide
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students
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studying
abroad with experiencing new
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life
and culture. According to research,
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students
who spend more time in a foreign country to continue their education can not
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only
overcome the language barriers
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but
also
hone their language
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skills
as well
as foster relationships with
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people
from
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different
backgrounds and
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make
lifelong friends.

This is not to say that
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studying
at home is
entirely
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bad
,
of course
. There are benefits in terms of convenience and feeling no homesickness.
However
, its disadvantages far outweigh the advantages.
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IELTS essay Studying abroad can be highly motivational for students and also inspire their dreams However whilst studying abroad can have a number of positive effects on students there are also many difficulties that they may meet along the way With this in mind it i v. 2

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4 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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