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Studying abroad can be highly motivational for students and also inspire their dreams However whilst studying abroad can have a number of positive effects on students there are also many difficulties that they may meet along the way With this in mind it i v.1

Studying abroad can be highly motivational for students and also inspire their dreams However whilst studying abroad can have a number of positive effects on students there are also many difficulties that they may meet along the way With this in mind it i v. 1
The modern world is growing rapidly compared to that of the past decade, many villages are being converted into towns and many towns are growing into big cities. With the rapid expansion of cities, there are many problems related to transportation and food. Governments are spending millions of money on transportation projects like high speed rail. However, some people believe that this money should be spent on existing public transport. In the present world, the cities are expanding merging nearby suburbs into it. This mass expansion often leads to congestion and pollution in the cities. Due to close proximity of many suburbs, there will be huge traffic jams leading to both air and noise pollution. Charges of existing public transport which includes buses and local trains are higher due to high demand in the peak hours. Moreover, many cities in the world cannot sustain the rapid growth. Hence, existing roads cannot be extended more, so even if the governments spend money on existing transport, there can be traffic problems and fatal accidents. Finally, with the development of the metro rail system in many big cities, there is a reduction in the travel time because of no traffic. Nonetheless, tickets are very costly. Turning on to the other side of the argument, Many countries are planning to develop suburbs far from existing cities, they also plan to link the two cities by introducing a fast rail transport system. With the increased cost of housing and food in cities, people are interested in moving to the nearby suburbs. For example, living in Mumbai is costly, with the introduction of a rapid rail system between Mumbai and Thane, people are migrating to Thane. This kind of development also reduces population stress on metropolis along with pollution. Additionally, high speed transport can cost more compared to normal public transport, but daily commuters can be offered with daily pass at reduced prices. Furthermore, buses and ferries are run by humans which can sometimes lead to accidents and drowning, but in the case of a high speed rail system, there are very minute chances of accidents as they are controlled by signals. To sum up, although public transport is used by many residents of the city, travelling with them is costly and time taking. Due to increased traffic jams and pollution, it is recommended to move out of the city. In my opinion, it is completely valid for the government's to spend money on new railway lines connecting cities as many people are interested in moving away from metros due to high housing costs.
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rapidly
compared to that of the past decade,
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many
villages are
being converted
into towns and
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many
towns are growing into
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big
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cities
. With the rapid expansion of
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cities
, there are
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many
problems related to transportation and food.
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Governments
are spending millions of
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money
on transportation projects like
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high
speed
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rail
.
However
,
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some
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people
believe that this
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money
should
be spent
on
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existing
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public
transport.

In the present world, the
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cities
are expanding merging nearby
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suburbs
into it. This mass expansion
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often
leads to congestion and
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pollution
in the
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cities
.
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Due
to
Consider using "proximity".
close proximity
of
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many
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suburbs
, there will be huge
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traffic
jams leading to both air and noise
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pollution
. Charges of
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existing
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public
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transport
which includes buses and local trains are higher
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due
to
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high
demand in the peak hours.
Moreover
,
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many
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cities
in the world cannot sustain the rapid growth.
Hence
,
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existing
roads cannot
be extended
more,
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so
even if the
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governments
spend
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money
on
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existing
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transport
, there can be
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traffic
problems and fatal accidents.
Finally
, with the development of the metro
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rail
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system
in
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many
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big
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cities
, there is a reduction in the travel time
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because
of no
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traffic
. Nonetheless, tickets are
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very
costly.

Turning on to the other side of the argument,
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Many
countries are planning to develop
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suburbs
far from
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existing
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cities
, they
also
plan to link the two
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cities
by introducing a
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fast
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rail
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transport
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system
. With the increased cost of housing and food in
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cities
,
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people
are interested
in moving to the nearby
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suburbs
.
For example
, living in Mumbai is costly, with the introduction of a rapid
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rail
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system
between Mumbai and Thane,
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people
are migrating to Thane. This kind of development
also
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reduces
population
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stress
on metropolis along with
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pollution
.
Additionally
,
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high
speed
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transport
can cost more compared to normal
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public
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transport
,
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but
daily commuters can
be offered
with daily pass at
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reduced
prices.
Furthermore
, buses and ferries
are run
by humans which can
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sometimes
lead to accidents and drowning,
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but
in the case of a
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high
speed
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rail
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system
, there are
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very
minute chances of accidents as they
are controlled
by signals.

To sum up, although
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public
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transport
is
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used
by
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many
residents of the city, travelling with them is costly and time taking.
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Due
to increased
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traffic
jams and
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pollution
, it
is recommended
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
out of the city. In my opinion, it is completely valid for the
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government
's to spend
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money
on new railway lines connecting
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cities
as
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many
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people
are interested
in moving away from metros
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due
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
housing costs.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Studying abroad can be highly motivational for students and also inspire their dreams However whilst studying abroad can have a number of positive effects on students there are also many difficulties that they may meet along the way With this in mind it i v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
428 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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