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study foreign language in your country or in foreign country where it is spoken Learning A Foreign Language v. 1
There is no doubt that many people rely more on the Internet for the latest news or trends. Although its utilization has disadvantages such as the threat to privacy, I believe they are outweighed by its advantages and I will support this argument with valid examples. To begin with, some opine that posting private information on the Internet websites may bring security problems. This is because once the individual shares their current location online, their enemies / opponents can plan strategies to hurt/harm them. To illustrate, in recent times the number of attacks on women have increased because their movements can be easily monitored through social media. If an individual is not posting any secure information online, such attacks can be lowered. Thus, many people oppose the extensive use of social networks to protect their privacy and security. On the other hand, I agree with the argument that many people nowadays are utilizing social media as a common platform to connect with each other. The reason for this is that with the help of renowned websites like Facebook, Twitter and Linked-in, people can connect to friends and family living in different parts of the world and also make new connections. For example, multiple job requirements are posted online; people who are subscribed to such information can utilize this information. There are also many newspapers that post the same information but print media takes more time than online media to reach the public. Hence, new generation is making an advantage of fast and reliable media. To conclude, there are both advantages and disadvantages associated with Internet usage. In my view the benefits such as faster connectivity and access to information outweigh the demerits.
There is no doubt that
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many
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people
rely more on the Internet for the latest news or trends. Although its utilization has disadvantages such as the threat to privacy, I believe they
are outweighed
by its advantages and I will support this argument with valid examples.

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begin
with,
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some
opine that posting private
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information
on the Internet websites may bring security problems. This is
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because
once the individual shares their
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current
location
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online
, their enemies / opponents can plan strategies to hurt/harm them. To illustrate, in recent times the number of attacks on women have increased
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because
their movements can be
easily
monitored through social
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media
. If an individual is not posting any secure
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information
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online
, such attacks can
be lowered
.
Thus
,
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many
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people
oppose the extensive
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use
of social networks to protect their privacy and security.

On the other hand
, I
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agree
with the argument that
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many
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people
nowadays are utilizing social
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media
as a common platform to connect with each other.
The reason for this is
that with the
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help
of renowned websites like Facebook, Twitter and Linked-in,
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people
can connect to friends and family living in
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different
parts of the world and
also
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make
new connections.
For example
, multiple job requirements
are posted
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online
;
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people
who
are subscribed
to such
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information
can utilize this
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information
. There are
also
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many
newspapers that post the same
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information
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but
print
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media
takes more time than
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online
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media
to reach the public.
Hence
, new generation is making an advantage of
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fast
and reliable media.

To conclude
, there are both advantages and disadvantages associated with Internet usage. In my view the benefits such as faster connectivity and access to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
outweigh the demerits.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay study foreign language in your country or in foreign country where it is spoken Learning A Foreign Language v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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