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Study shows that many criminals have a low level education. For that reason, some people believe that the bast way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Study shows that many criminals have a low level education. For that reason, some people believe that the bast way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. v. 2
Offenders do stupendous violation for the lack of schooling. To reduce such criminal activities, criminals have to learn the lesson from teacher residing in jail. As a result, they would be able to get work after passing their imprisonment. I, holistically, agree with this point of view, but some other measures must be taken to minimize the criminality as well as the building better future of criminals. To begin with, it is well said that all the criminals should provide better erudition when they are in the prison. This is because, after leaving confinement, they will be able to build their career with their skills. This, also, invariably, helps not only to do corruption again, but it also succours other people who have intention to do evil. For example, in the USA, studies have shown that 99% of crime rate has been decreased, since the government is focusing on education of the offenders when they lock at the four walls. Therefore, criminal minds are participating in the field of businesses and jobs, other people are also getting inspired by them. Other more solution to the crime rate would be that from early childhood days, teachers should teach about the detrimental effects of committing transgression so that the authority must include criminal books to the school curriculum. The countermeasure would, probably, curb the crime rate, for instance, that offender who murdered someone, he/she must sentence to death. The reason is that other people would learn a great lesson of committing heinous crimes. Moreover, the government has to be strict to a certain extent in declaring punishment such as long life imprisonment, imprisonment with hard work beside capital punishment. Ergo, only training in prison is not the solution to educate criminal, another method must be applied to reduce the lawlessness. To conclude, although most of the offenders have limited erudition so that they do atrocious work. It is a better measure that teaching in prison may help them to limit the scandal and enhances better future. However, from my perspective, beside this, child education, severe punishment would be the other best solution to this menace.
Offenders
do stupendous violation for the lack of schooling. To
reduce
such
criminal
activities,
criminals
have to
learn the lesson from teacher residing in jail.
As a result
, they would be able to
get
work after passing their imprisonment. I,
holistically
,
agree
with this point of view,
but
some
other
measures
must
be taken
to minimize the criminality
as well
as the building
better
future of criminals.

To
begin
with, it is well said that all the
criminals
should provide
better
erudition when they are in the prison. This is
because
, after leaving confinement, they will be able to build their career with their
skills
. This,
also
,
invariably
,
helps
not
only
to do corruption again,
but
it
also
succours
other
people
who have intention to do evil.
For example
, in the USA, studies have shown that 99% of
crime
rate has
been decreased
, since the
government
is focusing on education of the
offenders
when they lock at the four walls.
Therefore
,
criminal
minds are participating in the field of businesses and jobs,
other
people
are
also
getting inspired by them.

Other more solution to the
crime
rate would be that from early childhood days, teachers should teach about the detrimental effects of committing transgression
so
that the authority
must
include
criminal
books to the school curriculum. The countermeasure would,
probably
, curb the
crime
rate,
for instance
, that
offender
who murdered someone, he/she
must
sentence to death. The reason is that
other
people
would learn a great lesson of committing heinous
crimes
.
Moreover
, the
government
has to
be strict to a certain extent in declaring punishment such as long life imprisonment, imprisonment with
hard
work beside capital punishment. Ergo,
only
training in prison is not the solution to educate
criminal
, another method
must
be applied
to
reduce
the lawlessness.

To conclude
, although most of the
offenders
have limited erudition
so
that they do atrocious work. It is a
better
measure that teaching in prison may
help
them to limit the scandal and enhances
better
future.
However
, from my perspective, beside this, child education, severe punishment would be the
other
best solution to this menace.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Study shows that many criminals have a low level education. For that reason, some people believe that the bast way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Grammatical Range: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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