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Students who go directly from school to university benefit less from and contribute less to their courses than those who take a job or travel in order to get more experience in ‘real world’ before they start higher education. v.3

Students who go directly from school to university benefit less from and contribute less to their courses than those who take a job or travel in order to get more experience in ‘real world’ before they start higher education. v. 3
Higher education is the precursor to success in today's competitive world. Thus, every individual want to have a professional degree after schooling. After higher secondary, whether one should directly go to a university, or he/she should take a break before higher education, has always sparked a highly intense debate. In my opinion, a break is very much important for professional growth, at the same time it also helps in increasing focus at studies. Firstly, it is very apparent that in order to reduce training cost, companies nowadays prefer skilled professional rather than a mere fresher. Thus, break in studies and investing the same time for gaining a relevant experience, will make the students prepared for the professional challenges. For instance, the Indian IT giant "Infosys", which annually fire almost 20% of fresher hired by them. This number can be highly reduced if the employees are already trained for the job. Hence, it can be easily stated that the gap-year taken by students, when invested for proper training, will help them in future. Moreover, after 12-14 years of rigorous studying, a gap-year would act as a refresher for the students. They can plan their future studies in the meantime. Talking about my personal experience; my elder brother after his 12th standard in science, was fully prepared to have an honours degree in Mathematics, as Math was the subject which had always excited him. But, after having one-year training in an IT company, he realised the scope in IT field. The professional growth in IT was exponential as compared to a linear growth in the field of Math. Thus, after rejoining his studies he went for an Engineering degree in "Computer Science", which catalysed his career growth. Today, he is well settled, and is drawing a handsome salary! Now, after stating this we can easily say that the gap-year can work wonders, with respect to the decision making of a student. After analysing the above points, we are in a position to safely conclude that, gap-year is something which every student should opt for. This will be helpful in terms of their professional growth and plans for their future. It is also believed that in the coming future, more and more students will take a break from studies before joining the university and will invest that gap for getting themselves trained.
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today
's competitive world.
Thus
, every individual want to have a
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professional
degree after schooling. After higher secondary, whether one should
directly
go to a university, or he/she should take a
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break
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before
higher education, has always sparked a
highly
intense debate. In my opinion, a
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break
is
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very
much
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important
for
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professional
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growth
, at the same time it
also
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helps
in increasing focus at studies.

Firstly
, it is
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very
apparent that in order to
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reduce
training cost,
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companies
nowadays prefer skilled
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professional
rather
than a mere fresher.
Thus
,
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break
in
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studies
and investing the same time for gaining a relevant experience, will
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make
the
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students
prepared for the
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professional
challenges.
For instance
, the Indian IT giant
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Infosys
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"
, which
annually
fire almost 20% of fresher hired by them. This number can be
highly
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reduced
if the employees are already trained for the job.
Hence
, it can be
easily
stated that the gap-year taken by
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students
, when invested for proper training, will
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help
them
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in future
.

Moreover
, after 12-14 years of rigorous studying, a gap-year would act as a refresher for the
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students
. They can plan their future
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studies
in the meantime. Talking about my personal experience; my elder brother after his 12th standard in science, was
fully
prepared to have an
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honours
degree in Mathematics, as Math was the subject which had always excited him.
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But
, after having one-year training in an IT
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company
, he
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realised
the scope in IT field. The
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professional
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growth
in IT was exponential as compared to a linear
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growth
in the field of Math.
Thus
, after rejoining his
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studies
he went for an Engineering degree in
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"
Computer Science
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"
, which
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catalysed
his career
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growth
.
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Today
, he is well settled, and is drawing a handsome salary!
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Now
, after stating this we can
easily
say that the gap-year can work wonders, with respect to the
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decision making
of a student.

After
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analysing
the above points, we are in a position to
safely
conclude that, gap-year is something which every
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student
should opt for. This will be helpful in terms of their
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professional
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growth
and plans for their future. It is
also
believed that in the coming future, more and more
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students
will take a
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break
from
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studies
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before
joining the university and will invest that gap for getting themselves trained.
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IELTS essay Students who go directly from school to university benefit less from and contribute less to their courses than those who take a job or travel in order to get more experience in ‘real world’ before they start higher education. v. 3

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4 paragraphs
389 words
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