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Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than have free higher education provided by the state. v.6

Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than have free higher education provided by the state. v. 6
Education is a possession which makes a person stand tall and high. It adds to the overall physical personality of the person and makes him stand apart and outshines others who don’t possess it. Education is an eternal rock which never withers, not even during the wild waves of evil. It is only education which makes people bow in front of the educated and is one of the moral fabrics of any country which binds the whole society into one nation. It is due to this high pedestal which the education occupies that higher education must be provided by the State, albeit to those subjects of the state who are economically weak. There are, however, two schools of thought. One school of thought is of the view that the cost of higher studies should be borne by the students themselves. However, in such a scenario, all those meritorious students who are unable to continue their education for want of money (read economic resources) would be left with no option but to get themselves tagged as ‘drop outs’ by the society, due to no fault of theirs. ‘No student should be left deprived of education’ must be one of the objectives (read fundamental duty) of every Nation/State. On the other hand, a student who thrives for education must be wholeheartedly supported by the Nation/State. No stone must be left unturned to make available the most precious of the stones, i. e. the education, to the student. It is so because education is something which is dearer than the fine opals, more precious than emeralds! There’ve been quite a lot instances in the recent past, and even now, wherein the entire cost of higher studies of a student is sponsored by the State. The recent example which supports this is the educational sponsorship which was provided by the state government of ABC (a country) to the son of a widower who earns her livelihood by cleaning utensils at a roadside restaurant. It can thus be candidly concluded that education does elevate the horizon and encourages the mankind to labour at present for accruing enjoyment at a later stage in life. Consequently, the state must take responsibility, to a certain extent and for a certain set of individuals based on economic criteria to provide them with free higher education opportunities. This, in return, would only help the State/Nation to become independent and economically stable.
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Education
is a possession which
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makes
a person stand tall and high. It
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adds
to the
overall
physical personality of the person and
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makes
him stand apart and outshines others
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who
don’t possess it.
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Education
is an eternal rock which never withers, not even during the wild waves of evil. It is
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only
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education
which
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makes
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people
bow in front of the educated and is one of the moral fabrics of any country which binds the whole society into one nation.

It is due to this high pedestal which the
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education
occupies that higher
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education
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must
be provided
by the
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State
, albeit to those subjects of the
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state
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who
are
economically
weak.

There are,
however
, two schools of
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thought
. One school of
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thought
is of the view that the cost of higher studies should
be borne
by the
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students
themselves.
However
, in such a scenario, all those meritorious
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students
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who
are unable to continue their
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education
for want of money (read economic resources) would be
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left
with no option
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but
to
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get
themselves tagged as ‘
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drop outs
’ by the society, due to no fault of theirs. ‘No
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student
should be
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left
deprived of
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education’
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must
be one of the objectives (read fundamental duty) of every Nation/State.

On the other hand
, a
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student
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who
thrives for
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education
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must
be
wholeheartedly
supported by the Nation/State. No stone
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must
be
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left
unturned to
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make
available the most precious of the stones,
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i. e.
the
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education
, to the
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student
. It is
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so
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because
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education
is something which is dearer than the fine opals, more precious than emeralds!

There’ve been quite
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a lot instances
in the recent past, and even
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now
, wherein the entire cost of higher studies of a
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student
is sponsored
by the
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State
. The recent example which supports this is the educational sponsorship which
was provided
by the
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state
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government
of ABC (a country) to the son of a widower
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who
earns her livelihood by cleaning utensils at a roadside restaurant.

It can
thus
be
candidly
concluded that
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education
does elevate the horizon and encourages the mankind to
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labour
at present for accruing enjoyment at a later stage in life.
Consequently
, the
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state
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must
take responsibility, to a certain extent and for a certain set of individuals based on economic criteria to provide them with free higher
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education
opportunities. This, in return, would
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only
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help
the State/Nation to become independent and
economically
stable.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than have free higher education provided by the state. v. 6

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
401 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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