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The news is a source of knowledge about the world. How much can we trust the journalists? What are the qualities a good journalist should have? v.1

The news is a source of knowledge about the world. How much can we trust the journalists? What are the qualities a good journalist should have? v. 1
It is undeniable that news media has been an indispensable part of our life, displaying a much colourful world in front of us than ever before. Thanks to the development of the news media technology and the profession of journalists, we no longer feel unfamiliar about the other side of the planet. While enjoying the wide knowledge brought by the reporters, we should also take this news with a pinch of salt as some information seems to be enticing but may not be based on the truth of the fact. As we all know, most news companies run to make profits, which is likely to make some journalists distort their reports to earn ratings. Meanwhile, many news media are controlled by some powerful institutes including the government, which would cause the journalists reporting tendentious news for they want to be in favour of the government rather than the public. Spreading knowledge of the world for the public but not propagandising for a certain powerful organisation is the main quality a journalist should have. He should at least possess the following qualities: First of all, he should be unbiased and not easily swayed by any party or group, reporting the news as factual as it is. Second, journalists need to report news of such various fields of society, science, geology, medicine, entertainment etc. ; it would be tough for him to handle this job well if he is not versatile. Also, the most important personality of a journalist is that he must be brave and bold enough because there must be tough barriers waiting for him to break down. In conclusion, we should keep a clear head for the news reported by the journalists and a good journalist should possess a multifaceted personality.
It is undeniable that
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news
media has been an indispensable part of our life, displaying a much
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colourful
world in front of us than ever
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before
. Thanks to the development of the
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news
media technology and the profession of
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journalists
, we no longer feel unfamiliar about the other side of the planet.

While enjoying the wide knowledge brought by the reporters, we should
also
take this
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news
with a pinch of salt as
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some
information seems to be enticing
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but
may not
be based
on the truth of the fact. As we all know, most
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news
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companies
run to
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make
profits, which is likely to
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make
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some
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journalists
distort their reports to earn ratings. Meanwhile,
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many
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news
media
are controlled
by
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some
powerful institutes including the
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government
, which would cause the
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journalists
reporting tendentious
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news
for they want to be in
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favour
of the
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government
rather
than the public.

Spreading knowledge of the world for the public
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but
not
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propagandising
for a certain powerful
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organisation
is the main quality a
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journalist
should have. He should at least possess the following qualities:
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First of all
, he should
be unbiased
and not
easily
swayed by any party or group, reporting the
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news
as factual as it is. Second,
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journalists
need to report
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news
of such various fields of society, science, geology, medicine, entertainment etc. ; it would be tough for him to handle this job well if he is not versatile.
Also
, the most
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important
personality of a
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journalist
is that he
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must
be brave and bold
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enough
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because
there
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must
be tough barriers waiting for him to break down.

In conclusion
, we should
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keep
a
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clear
head for the
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news
reported by the
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journalists
and a
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good
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journalist
should possess a multifaceted personality.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay The news is a source of knowledge about the world. How much can we trust the journalists? What are the qualities a good journalist should have? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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