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Students should continue their study abroad than to study at home. v.1

Students should continue their study abroad than to study at home. v. 1
Education is one of the essential things in people’s live because it will help us to face the globalisation era. Talking about going abroad for the study is a common thing. There are no doubts when people want to study overseas. At the first time it will make them shocked or frustrated because of the new culture of atmosphere, but then it will create many advantages. Personally, I really do agree that students should continue their study abroad rather than study at home because there are some benefits and it will produce an exciting prospect for future. In this modern era, study abroad is one of the popular issues in the globe. The corporation from one country with other countries open the ease way to study overseas. A student who studies at overseas university should learn the language because it is used for everyday conversation for academic purposes such as spoken, written, et cetera. People who learn about a second language will help them to apply for a job. High qualification in education supporting by skills in another language will make a huge opportunity to get better jobs. Studying abroad will create big chances to keep the relationship with others or to make friends around the world. It will make us become professional and help us to adapt with others, learn about their countries, lifestyle, and the most important thing is open up our mind to see the world deeply with experiences. In addition, studying in another part of the world enables us to support the government in terms of improving the country in many aspects such as education, politics, economy, arts, and so on. We can make a positive contribution to take care of our country. In conclusion, it is very understandable that study overseas will create some difficulties in some aspects, but it offers us with worthwhile experiences and also makes us beneficial to others. Furthermore, a person who pursues his/her education abroad will experience such an unforgettable moment in his/her life.
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is one of the essential things in
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people
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live
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because
it will
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help
us to face the
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globalisation
era. Talking about going
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abroad
for the
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study
is a common thing. There are no doubts when
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people
want to
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study
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overseas
. At the
first
time it will
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make
them shocked or frustrated
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because
of the new culture of atmosphere,
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but
then it will create
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many
advantages.
Personally
, I
really
do
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agree
that students should continue their
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study
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abroad
rather
than
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study
at home
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because
there are
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some
benefits and it will produce an exciting prospect for future.

In this modern era,
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study
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abroad
is one of the popular issues in the globe. The corporation from one
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country
with
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other
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countries
open the
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ease
way to
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study
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overseas
. A student who
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studies
at
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overseas
university should learn the language
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because
it is
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used
for everyday conversation for academic purposes such as spoken, written,
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et cetera
.
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People
who learn about a second language will
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help
them to apply for a job. High qualification in
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education
supporting by
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skills
in another language will
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make
a huge opportunity to
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get
better jobs.

Studying
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abroad
will create
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big
chances to
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keep
the relationship with others or to
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make
friends around the world. It will
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make
us become professional and
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help
us to adapt with others, learn about their
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countries
, lifestyle, and the most
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important
thing is open up our mind to
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see
the world
deeply
with experiences.
In addition
, studying in another part of the world enables us to support the
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government
in terms of improving the
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country
in
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many
aspects such as
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education
, politics, economy, arts, and
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so
on. We can
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make
a
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positive
contribution to take care of our country.

In conclusion
, it is
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very
understandable that
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study
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overseas
will create
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some
difficulties in
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some
aspects,
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but
it offers us with worthwhile experiences and
also
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makes
us beneficial to others.
Furthermore
, a person who pursues his/her
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education
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abroad
will experience such an unforgettable moment in his/her life.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Students should continue their study abroad than to study at home. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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